Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

THE IMPROVEMENT IN SCIENTIFIC ADVANCEMENT SHOULD BE ENHANCE THE QUALITIES OF LIFE. I STRONGLY AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT BECAUSE INNOVATION IN TECHNOLOGY CAN IMPROVE HEALTHCARE, SOLVE ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS AND EFFICIENCY OF WORK.

TO COMMENCE WITH, ONE OF THE MAJOR SCIENTIFIC DISCOVERIES HAPPENS IN HEALTHCARE SECTOR. IT CAN HELP TO IDENTIFY DIFFERENT DISEASES AND DEVELOP PROPER CURE AND MEDICATION. IN THE PAST, LOT OF PEOPLE DIED BEACUSE LACK OF TREATMENTS AND MEDICINES DEVELOPMENT. HOWEVER, ANHANCEMENTS IN MEDICAL SYSTEM, DOCTOR ARE ABLE TO FINDOUT MANY ILLNESSES AND TAKE EFFECTIVE TREATMENTS ACCORDINGALY. FOR INSTANCE, BEFORE THIS TIME THERE WAS NO ANY CURE OF CANCER DISEASE BUT DUE TO THE DEVELOPMENT OF VACCINES NOW, SAVES MILLIONS OF LIFE.

MOREOVER, SICENCE MADE PEOPLE'S LIVES BECOME MORE EASIER AND CONVENIENT THROUGH TECHNOLOGICAL ADVANCEMENT. FOR EXAMPLE, IMPROVEMNTS IN TRANSPORTATION CAN MAKE SAVE PEOPLE'S TIME LONG DISTANCES TRAVELING. SIMILARLY, THE INTERNET AND SMARTPHONES ARE MAKE EASIER TO COMMUNICATION WITH EACHOTHER AROUND THE WORLD, EVEN IT ALLOWS TO DO WORK AT THEIR HOME. FURTHERMORE, FRAMER CAN USE MORDEN MACHINES AND METHOD TO INCREASE THE PRODUCTION OF THEIR CROPS AND INITIALY IT CONTIBUTES IN NATION'S ECONOMY.

HOWEVER, SCIENTIFIC DISCOVERY IS NOT THAT MUCH EASY IS REQUIRES LOT TIME AND EFFORTS. SOME RESEARCH ARE NOT DIRECTLY IMPROVE OUR LIVES BUT IT'S CAN INCREASE THE LEVEL OF KNOWLEDGE SUCH AS SPACE AND HISTORICAL RESEARCHS.

IN CONCLUSION, I BELIVE THAT IMROVING HUMAN'S LIFE IS A CENTRAL GOAL OF THE SCIENCE BECAUSE IT CAN HELP TO REDUCE ENVIRONMENTAL ISSUE AND LIVING STANDARDS, WHEREAS OTHER RESEARCHES LIKE KNOWNING ABOUT HISTORICAL CULTURE AND METHOD CAN AWARE PEOPLE TO HOW OUR ANCESTORS ARE LIVE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student addresses all parts of the task by taking a clear stance strongly agreeing that the most important aim of science should be improving lives. Relevant supporting ideas are presented regarding healthcare, environmental problems, and efficiency of work, along with an attempt at a counter-argument regarding space and historical research. However, the development of ideas tends to be somewhat superficial and lacks full elaboration in places. For instance, the discussion on environmental issues in the conclusion is not genuinely built upon in the body paragraphs. Overall, the response meets the general requirements of the prompt, earning a band 6.0 for addressing all parts of the task with relevant, albeit slightly under-developed, ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response shows a coherent overall arrangement and logical progression, utilising standard cohesive devices such as 'TO COMMENCE WITH', 'MOREOVER', and 'IN CONCLUSION'. Paragraphing is used to separate distinct points, moving from healthcare to technology and counter-arguments. However, referencing and transitions are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, 'ANHANCEMENTS IN MEDICAL SYSTEM, DOCTOR ARE ABLE...' demonstrates awkward cohesion at the sentence level, and the capitalisation throughout the essay disrupts the natural flow. While the overarching structure is logical enough to follow easily, the frequent mechanical errors in transitional phrasing and sentence links place this criterion firmly at a band 6.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the academic prompt, including terms like 'innovations', 'technological advancement', and 'medication'. However, there are numerous noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'ANHANCEMENTS', 'FINDOUT', 'ACCORDIGALY', 'FRAMER', 'MORDEN', 'CONTIBUTES', 'BELIVE', 'IMROVING', 'ISSUE', and 'KNOWNING'. While the meaning is generally clear despite these inaccuracies, the high frequency of spelling mistakes and awkward collocations like 'EFFICIENCY OF WORK' restrict the lexical score. The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and control required for higher bands, fitting the descriptors for a band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and conditional-like structures (e.g., 'IN THE PAST, LOT OF PEOPLE DIED BEACUSE LACK OF TREATMENTS...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors across the text, including missing articles ('lot of people', 'lack of treatments'), incorrect verb forms ('are make easier', 'is requires'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('doctor are able', 'some research are not'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, with the entire essay written in capital letters. These errors can cause occasional difficulty for the reader, though they do not completely impede communication. This performance aligns with a band 5.0.

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