Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's rapidly changing world, technology plays significant part in every human's life and the researcher are constantly trying to do improvisation to make it batter. Many people believes that science's ultimate goal should be to improve individual's lives. I strongly agree with this view. In this essay, I will provide justification to prove my statement.
to begin with, As in today's modern era the number of natural disaster happening is constantly increasing while it is not in our hand to stop it from happening. but science can definitely pay more attention toward infrastructure as It is the most important part of any city or country. places such as person's residence, statues or famous areas. If science can come up with the technology to save this type of structure many people will not loss it's home or council can save there amenities. in this way science can directly improve anyone's life.
Moreover, science can also pay more attention towards healthcare. There are many diseases which directly affect people's life. Illness such as cancer, polio or permanent disabilities. there is science can pay more attention towards curing it, make process slower or painless. these will directly or indirectly help people to make their life batter.
furthermore, Researchers can also merge with government and do some improvisation in the filed of local transportation or improving the qualities of road. As many people use city transport to travel from A to B. While many middle class individuals also owns personal vehicle but always complains about road's condition.
To conclude, Although General mode of transportation is at most important. I believe that the end of science should be improve everyone's life. This is primary because improvement towards medical line will be beneficial to everyone because diseases doesn't depend someone's financial condition and also house is a very important accessory of someone's life. If science could improve it. Then, it will directly improve people's life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position agreeing that the most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. Ideas are presented regarding infrastructure, healthcare, and transportation, which directly link back to the core theme of improving daily existence. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat constrained by limited elaboration and awkward phrasing, placing the response around Band 6.0. While all parts of the task are addressed and a clear stance is maintained, the support for some points remains somewhat under-developed, particularly regarding how infrastructure and transportation directly serve as the primary aims of science. Nevertheless, the central argument is relevant and sustained throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing used to separate distinct ideas, such as infrastructure, healthcare, and transportation. However, cohesion is frequently faulty or mechanical. The writer relies heavily on transitional phrases like 'to begin with', 'Moreover', and 'furthermore', yet sentence-to-sentence referencing is sometimes unclear, notably with pronouns ('this', 'these') that lack clear antecedents. Furthermore, punctuation and capitalisation errors at the start of sentences (e.g., 'to begin with, As in today's...') disrupt the flow. Overall organisation is evident, but the management of cohesive devices aligns best with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'infrastructure', 'amenities', and 'disabilities'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice, form, and collocation. Examples include 'researcher are constantly trying to do improvisation to make it batter' (improvements/better), 'will not loss it's home' (lose their homes), and 'medical line' (medical field). Spelling errors like 'batter' for better and 'filed' for field occur multiple times. Because these errors are noticeable but do not severely impede communication, the performance fits the Band 5.0 profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'researcher are', 'disease doesn't depend'), incorrect verb forms ('Many people believes'), and sentence fragments or run-on structures (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters or disjointed clauses like 'While many middle class individuals also owns personal vehicle but always complains'). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a Band 6.0, landing more comfortably at Band 5.0.
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