Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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Almost half of the participants were <20 years old (241, 59.7 %), half had secondary level education (205, 50.7 %), and one-third were from the poorest wealth quintile (123, 30.4 %). The prevalence of proper ENC was 57 (14.1 %). In 383 (94.8 %) cases, instruments were utilized to cut the umbilical cord, with 271 (67.1 %) showing no application of substances to the cord stump. Following birth, 396 (98.0 %) newborns underwent drying, while 294 (72.8 %) were immediately wrapped. Delayed bathing was observed in 131 (32.4 %) cases, with 359 (89.9 %) initiating breastfeeding. Proper ENC was associated with assistance by skilled birth attendant (SBA) (p = 0.004) and residence (p = 0.047). Higher odds of proper ENC were found among those who received assistance by SBA (AOR: 2.39; 95 % CI: 1.32–4.32; p = 0.004) and belonging to the middle class (AOR: 2.90; 95 % CI: 1.26–6.68; p-value=0.012).

Conclusion

Proper ENC in institutional birth is not widely practiced in Bangladesh. Targeted health promotional activities and policies, especially assistance by a SBA and raising awareness among mothers of the poorest families, can help to improve ENC practices during institutional birth.

Keywords

Essential newborn care; ENC; Bangladesh; Institutional births; MICS

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1. Introduction

The neonatal period, which is defined as the first 28 days of a newborn's life, is the most critical and vulnerable period in terms of survival, as during this period, infants are at the highest risk of mortality. Estimates stay that globally in 2021, 2.3 million newborns died, with an average rate of 18 per 1000 live births, or 6400 neonatal deaths per day.1 Research indicates that a significant portion of neonatal deaths, approximately half, take place within the initial 24 h following delivery. The leading causes of these early neonatal deaths are often attributed to factors such as preterm births, severe infections, and birth asphyxia.2

While there has been a decline in the global neonatal mortality rate (from 37 deaths per 1000 live births in 1990 to 18 deaths per 1000 live births in 2021), it's important to acknowledge the presence of significant disparities in neonatal mortality across different regions and countries. Sub-Saharan Africa and South Asia, in particular, have been identified as regions with the highest neonatal mortality rates. In South Asia, for example, the estimated neonatal mortality rate in 2021 was 23 deaths per 1000 live births.1

Most of the neonatal deaths occur in low-income and lower-middle-income countries, where healthcare systems face limitations. Other contributing factors include non-institutionalized births and failure to ensure assistance by skilled birth attendants (SBA). Fortunately, most of these deaths are preventable through the implementation of evidence-based health interventions that are accessible, cost-effective, and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response fails to address the prompt regarding the aim of science and whether improving people's lives should be its primary focus. Instead, the beginning of the text consists of random keyboard smashing and gibberish, followed by a completely unrelated academic medical article about newborn care in Bangladesh. Because the writing does not engage with the set question about science and society, it only addresses the task minimally and tangentially, resulting in a low score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

The text lacks overall organisation and clear progression. It opens with meaningless strings of characters and gibberish sentences, before abruptly shifting into a pasted medical study complete with headings, statistics, and results sections. There is no logical connection between the initial gibberish and the inserted article, and the excerpt ends mid-sentence. Paragraphing is entirely driven by the structure of the copied text rather than a coherent essay plan, leading to a fragmented and disjointed piece of writing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Within the copied medical article, the vocabulary is adequate and handles subject-specific terminology appropriately, featuring words such as 'prevalence', 'quintile', 'asphyxia', and 'disparities'. However, the opening portion of the response displays a complete lack of lexical control with random characters. Furthermore, because the bulk of the vocabulary is lifted directly from an external medical source rather than produced by the student to answer the prompt, the range is limited to what could be pasted, preventing a higher evaluation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical structures found within the copied excerpt demonstrate a mix of simple and complex forms, including relative clauses and passive constructions such as 'instruments were utilized to cut the umbilical cord'. However, the opening section contains severe structural breakdowns and nonsensical strings of letters that cannot be evaluated as grammatical sentences. Throughout the copied text, while formal academic phrasing appears, the presence of erratic text blocks and an incomplete ending highlights a lack of original control over sentence structures and punctuation.

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