Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

undoubtedly in this modern era scientist is working on new technologies to improve living standard of multitudes where as crucial scope of scince will be modified individuals living standard i strongly agree with this given statement due to various revelant reasons

to begin with scince plays a crucial role in live of dwellers and improve their living sense due to various reasons first and foremost one is developing new technologies like mobile phone and internet which makes the life of multitued much easier in this modern era every one can get solution of any difficulty in just on click of searching their problem apart from this individual get imformation about our solar system the study of planets just because of scince and NASA they give the knoweledge that what is happiening around the earh by using their settelites and advanced technology

however their are more revelant reasons to justify this statement firstly get to know about human functioning in different subject named as biology by which humans can protect their body from various dieseases and keep their physcial and mental health healthier besides this there are multiple chemical test and solutions are formed in laborities which is helpful for many builder while making buldings and house and for example many food companies take a lab test from scientis to prove the pureity of a material which helps individuals to justify either the food ispure or mixed |

to encapsulate that the revelant reasons for this statement which are improving technology and give imformation about human body which improves the lives of dwellers because of science

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by taking a clear position on whether science's main aim should be improving people's lives. Relevant ideas are presented, such as technological advancements in daily life and medical and biological research protecting health. However, some ideas are more fully developed than others, which places the response at this level. For instance, the discussion on mobile phones and the internet is expanded with clear examples, whereas the points regarding solar systems and chemical tests for building materials are somewhat under-developed and lack clear extension. To reach a higher level, every main idea needs to be fully elaborated with clear, relevant examples and deeper analysis throughout the entire essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction and conclusion, demonstrating an attempt to organise ideas into paragraphs. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty, and referencing is not always clear, which keeps the essay at this band. For example, transition markers like "to begin with", "however", and "to encapsulate that" are used, but sentences within paragraphs lack smooth flowing links, and run-on sentences obscure the logical progression. Additionally, paragraphing is not used effectively; the second and third body points are compressed or awkwardly merged. To improve, you should ensure each main point has its own distinct paragraph and use a wider variety of cohesive devices naturally without over-relying on repetitive introductory phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, providing enough words to communicate the central arguments about science and technology. You attempt to use less common vocabulary items such as "multitudes", "advanced technology", and "biological", but there is noticeable inaccuracy in word choice, collocation, and spelling throughout the text. Examples of lexical errors include writing "scientist" instead of "scientists", "scince" instead of "science", "revelant" instead of "relevant", "imformation" instead of "information", and "dieseases" instead of "diseases". These errors and occasional inappropriate word forms do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score. To move up, you need to expand your range of vocabulary, use less common items more precisely, and carefully check your spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting to connect clauses using conjunctions and relative structures. However, there are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence boundaries that hinder fluency. Many sentences lack proper punctuation, resulting in long run-on structures without capitalisation or periods, such as the opening sentence and the entire concluding paragraph. Furthermore, there are errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as "scientist is working" instead of "scientists are working" and "living standard" instead of "living standards". While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band. To improve, you must focus on controlling basic sentence boundaries, using correct punctuation, and ensuring subject-verb agreement.

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