Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that science should work for the betterment of humans and their lives but the some think opposite of that. Personally, I agree with this statement that science should need to do which work best for us and for out life. But we will discuss both point of views with the right reason.

Firstly, we need to knwo the meaning of sicence and it is the study of something with experiments nad observations. And now the why factor like why the need of experiments occur? And the answer of this question is simple, that we get some results that gives benift to us. And obviously in the past and so far science has done marvellous things in health or any other field that beniftted us. And still the scientists doing hteir job to help humans basically. For example: The aim of science is to produce the cure of cancer as early as possible. Surely this will help people in the future due to scientists.

But there is an another picture as well that we need to talk about and it is that the science has distracted as well in recent years as they are doing things that gave harm in place of help . For instance: Nuclear and atom bom iis one the finest examples which means they were doing nothing best for humans. Also the climate change due to the sicence as scoentists putting their legs in the nature whhich will harmful in the future.

In conclusion, obviously the science and scintist main goal is to provide as much benifits as they can and this is why I am in the favour of this but there should be other facote whic means we should overlook the other facotrs as well like weapon and climate problems which is due to science.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is stated clearly: you agree that science should improve people’s lives, while recognising possible harms. The examples of cancer treatment, nuclear weapons and climate change are relevant to the question. However, the response only partly develops the argument. The discussion of cancer treatment explains the benefit in general terms, but does not show how this supports your view in detail. The opposing point is also introduced, yet the link between scientific activity and climate change is asserted rather than explained. The introduction promises to discuss “both point of views,” but the essay does not fully weigh these against your position. Develop each example with a clearer explanation and keep the central argument focused on what science’s most important aim should be.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and harms, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “But” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the series of questions about the meaning and purpose of science delays the main point, and phrases such as “there is an another picture” do not connect the argument smoothly. Some references are unclear, including “they” in the discussion of scientists and “this” in the conclusion. The conclusion repeats the main position but introduces “other factors” without clearly explaining them. Use more direct topic sentences, connect each example to the claim it supports, and make references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “experiments,” “observations,” “cure,” “nuclear” and “climate change,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning harder to follow. Examples include “work for the betterment of humans,” “doing things that gave harm,” and “putting their legs in the nature.” There are also frequent spelling errors, such as “sicence,” “beniftted” and “scintist,” which reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing vague phrases with specific terms for scientific benefits and risks would make the argument more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some attempts at longer structures, for example, “But there is an another picture as well that we need to talk about.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “the some think opposite of that,” “the scientists doing hteir job,” and “the science and scintist main goal is.” These show problems with articles, verb forms and subject–verb agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long sequence of questions in the second paragraph. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their structure.

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