Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is believed by some people that the, the main of science must be to improve people's lives. I completely agree with this statement. This essay will discuss why sciene need to improve the individuals lives and explain with some examples in the upcoming paragraphs.

There is not any thing which is difficult for science. It also help to done many impossible researches and experiments for instance, find vaccination to prevent harmful diseases, motorvehicles which make travelling easy and also genetically modified food which is very helpful to feed a large number of population and a lot of other things which is done by science. Transportation is the very big reason for air pollution it also rised difficulties for every living things and also effect persons lungs by harmful gases. Furthermore, it also effect climate in various ways such as damage ozone layer which causes cancer , so science need to improve transportation which is environment friendly and prevent everyone from harmful diseases.

Moreover, population become dense in some counries but land for living and feedinhg is limited. It increased problems regarding homeless and hungry. After become unhappy from these type of life people commit wrong activities such as robbery, mudder even sometimes take step to suicide, Therefore science need to built appartments which survive very long time and strong which is survive in the earthquake also.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you completely agree that science should improve people’s lives, and you give relevant examples such as vaccines, transport, food production and housing. However, the response addresses the task only partially because these examples are mostly listed rather than explained in depth. The discussion of pollution introduces a useful problem, but the link between it and science’s central aim could be made more explicit. The housing paragraph also needs clearer reasoning about how scientific advances would address homelessness and hunger. In addition, the response is 23 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop your reasons and examples. Extend each main idea with explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a clear position. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” help signal additions, and the examples are generally grouped by topic. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long, crowded sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from vaccines and vehicles to pollution and climate effects without clearly separating the examples from the argument. The second paragraph also shifts quickly from population density to crime and then to apartment construction. Use one central point per paragraph, explain it in sequence, and make references between ideas clearer; this would reduce the current list-like and sometimes mechanical flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “vaccination,” “genetically modified food,” “air pollution” and “earthquake,” so the reader can identify the subject of your examples. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning less clear. Phrases such as “the main of science,” “feed a large number of population” and “survive very long time” are not natural in this context. There are also spelling errors, including “sciene,” “counries” and “mudder.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for discussing scientific aims and social problems, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain the examples rather than relying on broad terms such as “things” and “problems.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Furthermore” and a clause explaining that pollution “causes cancer.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “It also help,” “science need to improve,” and “population become dense,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. Sentence construction is also faulty in “which is survive in the earthquake also,” and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly in the long first body paragraph. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, then combine ideas using subordinate clauses only when you can control them. Proofreading for agreement, articles and sentence boundaries will improve clarity.

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