Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Science contributes a lot for human being to improve their life.I strongly agree that science improves human life.In recent decates, inovation in science had increased and solve a very huge problem just like a piece of cake.science major role in medical field, defencing countries ect.

In the past, some dangerous deceases like cancer, brain tumer etc was not treat well.but nowadays, it becomes easy to handle the situation.For intsance, my relatives was suffering from diabaties and thier was a very critical situation and the interesting thing was no one know she had diabaties. one day some thing wrong with him and we took them to hospital.doctars came to the spot and analyze all the situation. they treated them vary well at the end his life was saved and doctor gave him medicines to take regularly.

scientists are trying to make more new thing that helps people saving thier lifes.nowadays people consumes a lot of junk food which is responsible for many desease but people are not trying to escape from this trape.In contrast ,people have knowleged about eating unhealthy food makes poison but they refuse it to except.for instance,my friend eat a lot of junk food and i always guide him that this is not good for your health.on day we went to the pizza shop and they eta to much at the end he was on the ground and we took him to the hospital and with helpof science we saved thier life.

In conclusion, the science only aim for saving human life and improve human life time and i think everyone agree with me that science is crucial part of life.and the last thing take science as a positive not as a negative

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that science should improve people’s lives, and the examples about medical treatment and your relatives’ experience are relevant to this view. However, the response addresses the question only partially because it mainly describes ways science can save lives, rather than explaining why this should be its most important aim or considering other possible aims of science. The two personal examples also make similar points, and the second is difficult to follow. Develop your reasoning by explaining the importance of improving lives compared with aims such as expanding knowledge, and support each main point with a clear, specific explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation. The medical examples are grouped together, and phrases such as “For instance” and “In conclusion” signal examples and the ending. However, progression is limited: both body paragraphs repeat the idea that science saves lives, and the second example moves abruptly from junk food to a medical emergency. Some references are unclear, as in “we took them” and “his life,” making it hard to identify who is being discussed. Use each paragraph to develop a distinct reason, arrange events in a clear sequence, and use linking phrases and pronouns only when their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical field,” “scientists,” “medicines” and “junk food,” and the reader can generally identify your main subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “life” and “science.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices—such as “decates,” “deceases,” “trape” and “except” where “accept” is intended—sometimes make the message difficult to understand. Some expressions are also unnatural, including “solve a very huge problem just like a piece of cake” and “science major role.” Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including sentences that explain events in sequence. However, the range is limited, and attempts to connect several ideas often produce faulty structures. Errors in tense, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries occur frequently: for example, “innovation in science had increased and solve” shifts verb forms, while “some dangerous … was not treat well” has problems with agreement and verb form. Several sentences also run together without appropriate punctuation, as in the opening paragraph. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses. Check that subjects and verbs agree and that verb forms remain consistent.

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