Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent era, scientific approaches are very beneficial for humans in almost every expect of their lives. I am fully agreed with this, as science is giving us many comforts in my life. This essay will discuss how both is personal and professional life, its role is demanding, as it is providing a lot to us.

Firstly, medical field has been becoming advance since years by using researches done by scientists. Many vital diseases are now be cured by using advanced technology. For example, cancer is a disease of this century. Although, initially it was not treated well due to lack of medical facilities but as the research system develop advance, treatment of its becomes possible. Moreover, various vaccines has been developed against genetic diseases, like polio vaccine in Pakistan is very helpfull to fight against polio viruse in pakistan.

Secondly, science is even helping in diagnosing future hazardus. Take one, a team in China has made possible cure to a viruse which is expected in next two-decades. The same team has done a favour to whole world by making corona vaccine, which saved lives of many. In addition, scientific researches are providing us knowledge about future climate change outcomes like floods and drop in earth temperature. Hence, various responsible nations are taking steps to aviod such dangerous results. For instance, World Health Organization held a recent meeting to alarm the whole world to follow every possible measures against incoming future problems.

Thirdly, through advancement in knoweledge by science, humans personal lives are getting many advanatages. Such as education, transportaion, safe food pacaking, convinience is household applications, wheater forcast predictions, map reading apps and many others.

In comclusion, I would like to appriciate all the efforts done by science in recent era for making human life easy anf comfortable, along with future predictions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you fully agree that science should improve people’s lives, and you support this with relevant examples from medicine, disease prevention, climate forecasting, and everyday technology. The discussion of vaccines and medical treatment gives the response a clear connection to the question. However, some points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim about a Chinese team developing a cure for a virus expected in the future is unclear and needs a reliable, specific explanation. The final paragraph lists benefits such as transport and food packaging but does not show how they improve people’s lives. To develop the response further, explain the significance of each example and address why improving lives should be science’s most important aim, rather than simply one important aim.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, three body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In addition” help readers follow the main points, and the examples generally sit under relevant topic areas. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and connections between ideas are not always clear. The opening promises to discuss personal and professional life, but the body does not clearly follow that distinction. The third body paragraph is mainly a list, while the second moves from a future virus to COVID-19 and then climate change without explaining the links. Some references, such as “the same team,” are also unclear. Use more focused topic sentences and explain how each example supports the paragraph’s central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical facilities,” “vaccines,” “climate change outcomes,” and “future predictions.” These choices show that you can discuss several areas of science, and the main meaning is usually understandable. However, inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations are noticeable and sometimes make the message less precise: “in almost every expect,” “research system develop advance,” and “safe food pacaking” are examples. Some expressions are also vague, such as “a lot to us” and “future hazardus,” which limits the precision of your argument. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common word partnerships, such as “scientific research,” “medical advances,” and “weather forecasts.” Aim to use fewer broad claims and select vocabulary that describes the specific benefit being discussed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “Although” and “as.” This gives the response some structural variety, and readers can generally identify your main position and examples. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For instance, “I am fully agreed” should be “I fully agree,” while “various vaccines has been developed” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “Although, initially…” is not correctly joined to the main clause, and “how both is personal and professional life” is difficult to interpret grammatically. Practise forming complete sentences and checking each subject against its verb. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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