Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The purpose of science and innovation should be the betterment of an individuals life. I agree that innovation can foster an advanced society and improve the standard of living hence, the primary objective for science should be to focus on human lives, however it comes with its adverse effects that make society more disjointed and comfortable.
Science is expected to make life less challenging. When it comes to a human, an individual can benefit to a great length by innovation in their daily life and get tasks done more efficiently. Science should focus on the upgrade for humans since human's have increasing responsibilites and too many birds to kill during one day. Technological improvements can help them multitask and perform with more speed.
Moreover, imagine not owning a washing machine or a vacuum cleaner. Consequently, every household task is now reliant on manual work which can take hours of an individuals life that could have otherwise been spent on something more productive.
On the other hand, innovation does come with its detrimental effects on the society as a whole. If innovation priortizes improving a man's life it could mean diminishing our in-born capabilities and the ability to think and be creative. Furthermore, excessive involvement of science in our lives can result in society becoming disjointed. If everything can be achieved online, done through a simple click, there would remain no reason to meet people in real life. For example: we could make friends online, and there is little or zero probability that we would meet them in the future.
To conclude, although science should make its objective to elevate people's lives it should not deviate from the fact that people can become more disjointed and comfortable provided by the ease. To mitigate these adverse effects society as a whole needs to come together and involve individuals in community related exercises and activites and nurture a sense of belonging.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
Your position is clear: you agree that science should improve people’s lives, while recognising possible social costs. You address both sides with relevant examples, including household appliances and online friendships, and the conclusion returns to your main view. This meets the task well overall. However, the discussion is uneven: the benefits of washing machines and vacuum cleaners are explained more concretely than the broader claim that science can weaken creativity or make society “disjointed.” The phrase “too many birds to kill during one day” is also unclear and does not effectively support your point. To develop the response further, explain how scientific progress can improve lives beyond convenience, and qualify or support the concerns with more precise reasoning and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress logically, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the argument. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. Some links, however, feel mechanical or do not make the relationship between ideas fully clear. For instance, “Consequently” introduces the household example without a clear cause-and-effect link, while the final sentence shifts from the risks of convenience to a proposed solution rather abruptly. The reference in “provided by the ease” is also unclear. Use more precise transitions and make each paragraph’s reasoning connect explicitly to the central argument.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “standard of living,” “detrimental effects,” “multitask,” and “sense of belonging.” These choices show an attempt to discuss both the benefits and consequences of scientific progress. Some less common expressions are not used naturally or precisely, however: “betterment of an individuals life,” “benefit to a great length,” and “too many birds to kill” weaken clarity. There are also spelling errors, including “responsibilites,” “priortizes,” and “activites.” The repeated use of “life” and “innovation” limits flexibility somewhat. Aim for accurate collocations and more precise terms, such as “quality of life,” “save time,” and “social isolation,” and proofread spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If everything can be achieved online” and a concession in “although science should make its objective…”. Meaning is generally understandable, and some sentences are controlled effectively. There are nevertheless some grammatical errors in agreement, articles, possessives, and punctuation. For example, “an individuals life” needs a singular possessive form, and “human's have” incorrectly uses an apostrophe and does not agree with the plural meaning. The opening sentence also joins independent clauses with a comma, and “For example:” uses punctuation awkwardly before the example. Review sentence boundaries and possessive forms, and check agreement and articles when editing; this would make your varied structures more consistently accurate.
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