Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often beleived that the purpose of science is to enhance the quality of peoples lives. I completely agree with the term that all these technologies and advancement in each sector is for making life humans better.

If we look at the healthcare sector it has significantly helped people to live longer and painfree lives. It provide cure for various disease which was not well defined without technolgy. The science provide antibiotics which are extracted by using multiple methods and techniques to help us fight against many Infectious conditions. Morever , It provide immunity to new borns in the form of vaccines which help them to protect aginst some deadly disease. It also facilitate adults to protect against new emerging health conditions. For example: It was almost impossible to fight with Covid 19 without labs and knownledge sicentific resereach provide us . On the other hand we can look into our bodies even before it shows sign such as these days cancers is being diagnosed at very early stages in healthcare system and advance kind of treatment is being provide with the help of new studies.

Furthermore, Science is improving the food quality and making it more benficial for human in context of increasing nutritional value in low cost products. Agrculture sector is improving day by day and facilitating more people in food industries with help of science we are making more diary products and healthy meat by improving the health animals and making cure for the deadly disesase. Mobile phones and laptops are making people work from home even when they are sick or stuck in some hurdle when they cant reach the office. Heavy machiners are built which are helping to construct more buildings and make life more effeicent .

In conculsion, We are surronded by benefits of sciences. It will be very diffcult for the umpcoming generations to even live without these technology and gudgets even though we are facing climate change and other enviromental issues which also being addressed by the sicence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the opening: you completely agree that science should improve people’s lives, and the conclusion reinforces this view. You address the task with relevant examples from healthcare, food production, and technology, including vaccines, cancer diagnosis, and working remotely. This breadth and your direct response meet the task well. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: the claims about healthier meat and dairy, for instance, do not show clearly how scientific advances improve people’s lives. The environmental issues mentioned at the end are also not developed. To strengthen the response further, explain the impact of each example and consider whether improving lives is science’s most important aim, rather than simply listing benefits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present examples, and a conclusion restates your position. The progression from healthcare to food and technology is generally easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, the second body paragraph combines several distinct ideas—agriculture, animal health, remote work, and construction—without clear transitions or enough explanation of their relationship. Some connections are also mechanical, particularly repeated use of “It” and “with help of science.” Organise each paragraph around a more focused main idea, and use clearer referencing and transitions to show how each example supports your central claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “healthcare sector,” “antibiotics,” “vaccines,” “nutritional value,” and “climate change,” so the reader can understand the areas you discuss. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “early stages” of cancer diagnosis. However, the range and control are limited by frequent spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations, including “quality of peoples lives,” “healthy meat,” and “Heavy machiners.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build accuracy by checking spelling carefully and learning common collocations as complete phrases. More precise wording for scientific advances and their effects would help you express your ideas with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “It would be very difficult … to even live without these technology” and a relative clause in “products … which help them.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make sentences difficult to follow. For example, “It provide cure” has subject–verb and article problems, while “the health animals” and “which also being addressed” show errors in sentence structure and verb forms. Several long sentences join multiple ideas without clear grammatical boundaries, particularly in the paragraph about agriculture and technology. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and complete clause structures, then proofread longer sentences for punctuation and clarity.

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