Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent times, there has being debates on the real essence of science. While some believe the most relevant use of science is to safe lives, others believe there is more to science than this. This essay will discuss both views, and argue that there is more to science than just saving of lives.
On the one hand, one of the most impactful significance of science is saving of lives. Thousands of lives has been lost in the past due to ignorance of people. But nowadays, due to the advent of science, more informed decisions are mde about sorces of diseases, caises and prevention. all thanks to science. For example, scientific discoveries made the elimination of covid 20 possibile in 2020. Additionally, people can make informed decisions on the lifestyle choices and dieting to prevent some medical conditions. for example obesity can be prevented by prevention of carbohydrate food.
on the other hand, Scoence as more a lot more to people than saving of lives for instances enginnering as made inventions of various machines which has helped made life easier availabe. The machines ranges from washinf machins, dish washers, blenders used in th home to factory machines such as fillers, loaders forklifts etc. Furthermore, SCience has made communications more easier. Nowadys, communication can be done in real time compared to letters and towncriers that was used in the past.
In conclusion,live saving is one of the significant discovries of science, however there iaar other equally importaant aspects of science beyond life saying.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Your position is identifiable: you argue that science has important purposes beyond improving or saving lives, and you support this with examples of household and factory machinery and faster communication. The response is relevant to the topic, but it does not fully match the question’s focus. The prompt asks whether improving people’s lives should be science’s most important aim, whereas the introduction and conclusion narrow this mainly to “saving lives.” The discussion of engineering and communication is useful, but you need to explain how these benefits compare with health-related improvements and why one should take priority. Some claims, such as the example about COVID, are also unclear or inaccurate, which weakens the support.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. The progression from health benefits to engineering and communication is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “Additionally” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This clear overall organisation is a strength. However, the contrast structure is somewhat mechanical, and the relationship between the examples and your central position is not always made explicit. The first body paragraph also contains abrupt fragments, including “all thanks to science,” while the second moves quickly between several examples. To strengthen progression, use topic sentences that directly connect each paragraph to the question and add clearer links explaining how each example supports your argument.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific discoveries,” “lifestyle choices,” “engineering,” “inventions” and “real time.” These choices show an effort to discuss science and its effects, but the range and control are limited, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “sorces,” “caises,” “possibile,” “enginnering” and “towncriers.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “one of the most impactful significance” and “science as more a lot more.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general wording with precise terms, while ensuring the chosen words fit the sentence, would make the argument clearer and more effective.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You use both simple sentences and some attempts at longer structures, including “While some believe…, others believe…” and “Additionally, people can make informed decisions…”. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries sometimes make the reader work to understand the ideas. For example, “there has being debates” should use a correct present-perfect form, and “Thousands of lives has been lost” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “But nowadays” is followed by a fragment, “all thanks to science,” and several sentences begin with lowercase letters after full stops. Practise accurate sentence construction and proofread for agreement, verb forms and punctuation while retaining your attempts at complex sentences.
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