Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern world, people think that one of the significant goals of science is to improve the living standards of the society. I strongly agree with this sentiment as I also believe that it should contribute to the humankind rather than other usless things.

The first reason is that the research in the medical science must provide incentives for wellbeing of the general public. The scientists are actively doing studies in this field, and by providing the benefits of it, people will get a better health, and cure for deadly diseases. For instance, the dying of people due to a global pandemic such as Corona, can be fixed if the spontaneous response by doctors are able to develop a vaccine. In this way, the individuals of any country can be saved as a result of science.

Furthermore, the improvements in the technology also allowed the people to get better education. It is because of science that more and more educational material is available online in different formats such as videos, audio, and images, which definitely helps in the access of study for far off children in the world. For example, in rural areas, parents can teach their off-springs at home on the phone if their is no school in that area. This is why it is loudly encouraged by the society that research in technology should be accessible to the deserving humans. However, the governments use these researches as a tool to win wars against their enemies, which can be distructive for the world.

In conclusion, the main goal of improving science should must be to enhance the lives of people in different perspectives such as health and equal access to education. I also believe that this sentiment is true.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you strongly agree that science should benefit humanity. You support this with two relevant areas—medical research and technology-enabled education—and the pandemic example helps illustrate the potential to save lives. The response also recognises a counterpoint, that governments may use research for warfare, before reaffirming your view. These features address the task well. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others: the education example explains access to learning, but the link between this and science’s most important aim could be made more explicit. The point about research being used in wars is introduced briefly without explaining how it affects your overall argument. Develop these connections to make the reasoning more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your position, two body paragraphs present supporting reasons, and a conclusion restates your view. Signposting such as “The first reason,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow. The examples are generally placed alongside the ideas they support. At times, however, connections between sentences are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “by providing the benefits of it” does not clearly identify what “it” refers to, and the shift from online education to governments using research for war feels abrupt. The conclusion also repeats the central claim rather than drawing together the two arguments. Use clearer referencing and add a sentence that links the counterpoint to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical science,” “deadly diseases,” “educational material,” and “accessible,” and you attempt some less common expressions such as “living standards” and “global pandemic.” However, several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision. Phrases such as “incentives for wellbeing,” “the dying of people,” and “access of study” are not natural in these contexts; “off-springs” and “distructive” are also inaccurate forms. “Other usless things” is vague and informal for an academic essay. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but they make parts of the argument less fluent. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including subordinate clauses such as “It is because of science that…” and a conditional example beginning “if there is no school.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “the spontaneous response by doctors are able,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “their is no school,” where the possessive form is used instead of “there.” The conclusion’s “should must be” combines two modal verbs incorrectly. There are also awkward sentence constructions, such as “the improvements in the technology also allowed the people,” which would benefit from a more controlled verb form and article use. Review agreement, modal verbs, and sentence construction to improve accuracy while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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