Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, Science has made significant improvements, to improve the living style of people and also to serve them the ease to come out of stress, i storngly agree with the aim of science that it will improve the people,s lives.

Firstly, i would like to say that science improved the study of technology, that will help us to do tasks in seconds and to save our time and efforts, For example Artifficial intelligence is one of the oppertunity that we get from the science improvement it helps us to make something in seconds and also gives us the brief knowledge related to our questions, Ai is widley used in IT sectors, it also save the time and become the reason of understanding the topic with low effort and help people to improve.

seconldy, science plays an important role in the study of medicine and it improves the way of treatment and also have good affects on the study of drugs, which helps the doctors to diagnose the treatment and treat it with the best cure, science also used in surgeries , For instance in opd it will be used for Xray and for other tests to diagnose the issue in short time, which is a good reason for doctors and for patients tho, it saves the time and also helps in choosing the right way to treat an issue.

In Conclusion, although science can serve many purposes, it will improved the health sector and also the technology with the aim of improve people,s lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that science should aim to improve people’s lives, and both body paragraphs give relevant reasons. The examples of AI saving time and medical technology supporting diagnosis and treatment directly address the prompt. However, the discussion is not equally developed: the AI paragraph makes broad claims about speed and effort without a specific illustration, while the medical paragraph gives more detail about X-rays and tests. The conclusion restates your view but does not draw together the reasons or consider the scope of the claim—for example, whether improving lives should be science’s primary aim alongside other goals. Developing and explaining each example more fully would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing expressions such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In Conclusion” help readers follow the main progression. Within paragraphs, however, several ideas are joined into long chains, particularly in the AI paragraph, so the relationship between claims and examples is not always easy to track. Some linking is also mechanical, and the conclusion repeats the central position rather than synthesising the two arguments. Use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links—for instance, explain how the AI example supports the claim about improving daily life—while keeping each paragraph focused on one developed point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “artificial intelligence,” “medicine,” “surgeries,” “diagnose,” and “treatment,” which allows you to discuss both technology and healthcare. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “IT sectors” and “right way to treat an issue.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear: “serve them the ease,” “study of technology,” and “good affects on the study of drugs” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “storngly,” “oppertunity,” and “widley” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, including explanations introduced by “which” and “that.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main meaning is generally recoverable. However, control is inconsistent: “science improved the study of technology, that will help us” has an unclear clause connection and tense choice, while “it also save the time” and “it will improved the health sector” show errors in verb forms and agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, with several comma splices and run-on sentences, especially in the first body paragraph. Practise accurate present-tense forms and divide long explanations into shorter sentences; then add complex clauses only where their relationships are clear.

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