Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Thesedays,science plays an important role in the lives of people with the infinite range of innovation.However,there are some major advantages of science which are most beneficial in the lives of person but also it has few disadvantages.In this essay we discussed the both point of view but i strongly agreed that improve the lives of our generations. To commense with,in the eearly 1800 the role of science was not define but with the passage of time it enchance the range of innovation was increased and also people was interested in science subject such as chemistry and physics.For example,moslty people belived that Newton theory of gravitation was true and it was highly recognized.So,the range of innovation was directly proportional to his theory.But in the 1860 the surged of scientic innovation was reached to sky rockets. On the other hand,in the early 2000 the scientific technology was enchance because the people know that the theory of Einstein was true also the research

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a position—“I strongly agreed” that science should improve people’s lives—and attempt to discuss both sides. However, the response does not adequately answer the question: it focuses mainly on the history of scientific ideas, such as Newton’s theory and Einstein’s research, rather than explaining why improving lives should be science’s most important aim. The disadvantages mentioned in the introduction are not developed, and there is no clear supporting example of science improving people’s lives. The response is also 90 words below the required minimum, which leaves the argument substantially incomplete. To strengthen it, explain your position directly, develop relevant reasons, and support them with specific examples such as medical advances or clean-energy technology.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction and transitions such as “To commence with” and “On the other hand.” These signals show an awareness of paragraph development, but the progression is difficult to follow because the main points are not clearly connected to the question. The first body section moves from the history of science to Newton and then to innovation without explaining the links between these ideas. The final section begins a point about Einstein but ends abruptly, so the response has no completed conclusion. Use each paragraph to develop one clear reason, connect examples explicitly to that reason, and finish with a concise restatement of your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “innovation,” “theory of gravitation,” “scientific technology,” and “research,” which gives the response a relevant starting point. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “the range of innovation was increased,” “surged of scientic innovation,” and “reached to sky rockets.” Spelling errors, including “commense,” “eearly,” and “belived,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check spelling carefully. Vocabulary such as “scientific advances,” “improve quality of life,” and “medical breakthroughs” would help you discuss the prompt more directly and clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “However” and a sentence beginning “For example.” Nevertheless, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. For instance, “the role of science was not define” needs a past participle, while “people was interested” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening sentence also joins ideas with “but also” without a clear grammatical structure, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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