Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Today many inventions contibute to human wellbeing and beneficial to people is some aspect of their lives. Improvements in people's lives should be the key motive for scientist to consider during development of new divices. I firmly believe that advancements aiming for betterment of lives will gain people's intrest.

One of the major reasons to consider improvements as the main aim is to gain popularity among people. If developments are carried out with regards to help people, they might found it useful in their lives, as a result demand for product increases. To clarify this, recent improvement in S50 smart watch proved itself with it's features to replace it with smart phones. This gained popularity among people as it is more convenient to carry than smart phones.

Furthermore, technological advancements in artifical inteligence which provides assistance in prediction of medical illness witnesed a drastic growth over a decade. As this improvements aimed for betterment of people in crucial situation such as cancer and TB with early treatment and diagnosis. For instance, AI tools to detect the tumor cell growth have paved it's way to assist with method treatment to be used, such improvements benefit both the patient and the heath care advisor.This reflects that science should aim for betterment of people's lives.

From my prespective, scientifical advancements which neglect to improve people's wellbeing have limited themselves in their growth and profits, as people may not purchase them when they find them least useful in their lives. Hence, science should aim to improve life with their advancemets and inventions.

In conclusion, the most significant motive of science should be advancements in people's lives, for there are two key reasons, to gain popularity among people and increase trust for their products between people. I strongly agree with the development, as it have tremandous benefits on people's wellbeing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that improving people’s lives should be science’s main aim, and you support it with examples involving a smartwatch and AI-assisted medical diagnosis. These examples are relevant, especially the discussion of earlier detection and treatment. However, the first reason—that useful developments gain popularity and demand—is developed more as a commercial benefit than as an explanation of why improving lives should be science’s priority. The smartwatch example also needs clearer detail about how it improves users’ lives. The medical example is more persuasive, but its benefits could be explained further, and the conclusion’s claim about increasing trust is not established in the body. Develop each reason with a clearer link to the question and more precise support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons and examples, and a conclusion restates your position. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the progression, and the medical example is placed logically after its main point. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, connections are occasionally mechanical or unclear. For example, “As this improvements aimed…” is a fragment that interrupts the explanation, while “This reflects” has an unclear reference. The conclusion also introduces “increase trust” without a clear preceding discussion. Make links between claims and examples more explicit, and use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “technological advancements,” “prediction of medical illness,” “early treatment and diagnosis,” and “wellbeing.” These choices help communicate the essay’s focus, and you attempt some less common terms such as “crucial situation.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “contibute,” “intrest,” “artifical inteligence,” and “tremandous” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “gain popularity among people” and “method treatment to be used.” Repeated use of “improvements,” “people,” and “aim” limits precision. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning natural collocations, and choose more exact terms when describing the benefits of scientific research.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures: “If developments are carried out…, they might…” and “as people may not purchase them…”. This gives the essay some structural variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “they might found it useful” should use the base form after “might,” and “As this improvements aimed…” is not a complete, correctly formed sentence. In “as it have tremendous benefits,” the subject and verb do not agree. Review sentence boundaries and check each clause for a clear subject and finite verb. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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