Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The improvement of human live is become possible for science in word the revolutionary inventions of science. The inventions has make humans life easy and productive. So, I do agree with it but there are some limit too.

As the time goes everything has a limit or should need a limit for greater good. As we realise day by day science makes a work easy but makes a man lasy and weak. And the modern science and invention also cost many human lifes we can take the World War Two as an instance.

Science make it world a better place but also make it hell, the manhattan project ment to no harm for the human beings but end of the day it cost more that 200,000 human lifes. COVID-19 cost by the coronavirus is being testing in lab for medical research to create medicine for the virus but some how it speads and cost over 7 millions lifes. All this thing is created for greater good but end of the day it caused human lifes.

Those are the mejor disturbing parts but science made every day live easy like the invention of automobiles that make communication fast, easy and reliable. The telephone removes the distance between pepole but the moder day smart phone create distances. The concentration and efforts of human brain is reduced by the smart phone error. The internet was the greatest invention ever if you put it in good use it can change your life but a wrong effect can destroy a community, the illegal sites in internet affects the minors the adults are discracted. The Facebook and Instagram is good for marketing and it also provides the scam and sham created my bad peopes.The revulation of gun is for war and now people use it out of aggression.

In the end my scences tell me invention and science is not bad, what make it bad the humans who uses it. Not is created for bad resons. So, I agree with the good uses of the inventions and motivate othes to keep it good.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You give a clear, qualified position: science can improve lives, but its effects depend on how people use it. The examples of the Manhattan Project, COVID-19 research, transport, phones and social media are relevant to the question and show that you consider both benefits and harms. However, the response develops the negative consequences more fully than the central claim about improving people’s lives. Some examples are asserted rather than explained—for instance, the claim about COVID-19 research does not clearly establish how the virus spread or how this relates to science’s aims. To strengthen the response, explain more directly what science should prioritise and develop a few examples with clearer reasoning and support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall essay shape, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting concerns and benefits, and a concluding position. The progression from harmful uses to everyday benefits is understandable, and phrases such as “As an instance” and “In the end” signal relationships between ideas. However, several paragraphs contain many examples without a clear internal order, so the main point can become difficult to follow. Connections such as “but” and “and” are repeated, and some references—such as “All this thing”—do not clearly identify what they refer to. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it; use more precise referencing and a wider range of linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “revolutionary inventions,” “concentration,” “aggression” and “medical research,” and you can communicate a range of examples. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “good,” “bad,” “make” and “life,” while inaccurate word choice and spelling sometimes make meaning harder to understand. Examples include “human live,” “lasy,” “discracted” and “revulation.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “the telephone removes the distance” and “cost more that 200,000 human lifes.” Build a bank of accurate topic-specific collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise choices would help distinguish beneficial scientific applications from harmful consequences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both short statements and attempts at longer, connected sentences, including conditional structures such as “if you put it in good use it can change your life.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction can make ideas difficult to follow. For example, “The inventions has make humans life easy” has problems with agreement and verb form, while “As the time goes everything has a limit” is not accurately formed. Several sentences also join multiple ideas without clear punctuation, particularly in the paragraph about phones and the internet. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build complex sentences with clear clauses and punctuation.

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