Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
I totally agree to the point that the primary purpose of science should be to improve people's lives. As with the growing technology and in this modern era humans are getting robotic in nature have to work 9 to 7 and nothing to do physically. Science can do this in many ways, like drawing such pattern that can engage peopple more in physucal work rather than relying totally on online things.
And one more way to improve human lives is through advancements in the medical field as these days most of the lives are at a risk of different diseases and science can develop ways or medicines that can help them to fght against such lethal diseases. For example I know a person who suffered from a fatal disease of cancer and by the use of scientific treatment he got his health back.
Science should also try to improve the ways that are less harmful for the environment. Essentially, emerging issues like global warming and environmental sustainability should be addressed by science. These issues can be coped up by using electric vehicles and green buses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
Your position is clear from the opening: you agree that science should primarily improve people’s lives, and you give relevant examples from health, physical activity and environmental protection. The cancer-treatment example helps illustrate the medical point. However, the response addresses the task only partially because the ideas are brief and not sufficiently explained: for instance, the suggestion that science should design patterns to encourage physical activity is difficult to understand and is not developed. The environmental point is also asserted rather than supported with a specific explanation or example. The response is 65 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your reasons. Extend each main idea and explain how it supports your position.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall arrangement: it begins with your position and then presents points about physical activity, medicine and the environment. Connectors such as “For example” and “Essentially” show attempts to guide the reader. However, progression between ideas is sometimes abrupt. The opening moves from modern technology to people becoming “robotic” and then to designing patterns, without clearly explaining the links. “And one more way” is conversational and does not establish a strong paragraph structure, while the final environmental point arrives without a concluding summary. Use separate, focused paragraphs for each reason, and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “advancements in the medical field,” “lethal diseases,” “global warming” and “environmental sustainability.” These choices help communicate the main areas of your argument. However, the range is limited, and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “getting robotic in nature,” “drawing such pattern,” and “coped up by using.” Spelling slips, including “peopple,” “physucal” and “fght,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe people as becoming “less physically active” and say environmental problems can be “addressed through” cleaner transport.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a sentence beginning “For example” and a clause introduced by “as.” The main ideas are generally understandable, but control is uneven. The opening sentence after your position, “As with the growing technology … humans are getting robotic in nature have to work 9 to 7,” is incomplete and lacks a clear grammatical connection between its clauses. In “Science can do this in many ways, like drawing…,” the structure is also awkward, and “a person who suffered … and by the use … he got” combines ideas without a well-controlled sentence pattern. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use punctuation to separate explanations from examples.
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