Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent times, it is being said that technology's first priority should be to improve person's life. In my view, it is a good idea to think that, but in some situation it might be a risky move for both technology and for humans because it has many pros and cons at the same time. I partially agree with the statement, and I will discuss about the statement in the below paragraph.

In this decade, the science and technology became very advanced with the help of intelligent scientists and tech professor, who continuosly working to improve technology in every sector. Therefore, there were many innovations made for humans to live longer, and scientists are still trying to research in depth. However, these types of experiments and advancements could be a helpful to live longer for humans at some point. For example, in 2012 Japanese researchers invented a coupe type of machine, the machine can catch a cancer cells before it occurs in body , with the help of analysing tech. When Japanese government implemented this machines in hospitals, many patients showed up to medical centre and surprisingly after four years, Japan's government shown 80% of decline in cancer ratio. As a result, people who were affected from cancer became healthy again with the help of science and happily living life. Thus, we can say it science can improve person's life.

On the other hand, the same technology also has a big disavantage. Sometimes these types of technologies can affect a cause such as, it has a chances that people might die by taking help of science. It means, at some point it not gives perfect results as people want. For example, there was a case in New York hospital, a person was died due to wrong reports. The person had a serious ache in his stomach and he tried hospital's automated report machine by giving symtoms, the machine gave him a prescription of wrong medicine due to some erroes, when person took those medicine without consulting doctors. Eventually, he died. As a result, we need a advancement for human life from science, but we actually need perfectly trusted source that people can trust and it can be helpful for human's health.

In conclusion, As per discussion I have discussed both pros and cons on this topic and In my view, the idea is positive but it can lead to several causes, and upon that it can cost more. So, time steadily innovations are perfect for humans to improve people lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is stated clearly: you partially agree that science should improve people’s lives, while recognising possible risks. Both sides are addressed through examples of cancer detection and an automated medical report, and the conclusion returns to the central issue. This is relevant coverage of the task. However, some points are not fully developed or clearly connected to the question of science’s most important aim. The cancer example makes a strong claim about an 80% decline without explaining its source or how the technology caused it, while the hospital example focuses on a technology failure rather than weighing science’s broader priorities. Explain why improving lives should—or should not—take precedence over other scientific aims, and support examples with clearer reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and risks, and a conclusion. The contrast between the two main body paragraphs is easy to follow, and signposts such as “However,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help show the direction of the argument. At times, though, cohesion feels mechanical or the links between ideas are unclear. For example, “Thus, we can say it science can improve person’s life” repeats the preceding point, while “Sometimes these types of technologies can affect a cause such as” does not clearly introduce the risk that follows. Use more precise references and make each paragraph’s main point explicit, then connect examples to that point without repeating it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “innovations,” “research,” “automated,” “prescription,” and “consulting doctors,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “cancer cells” and “decline in cancer ratio.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling sometimes make the meaning less natural or precise. Examples include “a coupe type of machine,” “a big disavantage,” “a serious ache,” and “perfectly trusted source.” Several phrases are repeated, particularly “improve people’s lives” and “with the help of science.” Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling, and choose precise terms for the intended meaning—for instance, distinguish a screening device from a treatment or diagnostic system.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “who,” “when,” and “because,” and the main ideas are generally understandable. Some sentences are controlled, such as “As a result, people who were affected from cancer became healthy again,” though this example also shows that errors remain. Verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are inconsistent: “the science and technology became very advanced,” “who continuosly working,” and “a person was died” illustrate problems with tense, missing auxiliary verbs, and passive forms. There are also run-on or awkwardly joined clauses, especially in the hospital example. Practise forming complete clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb patterns; clearer sentence boundaries will make your complex ideas easier to follow.

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