Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The main vital role of science and technoly is to be improve people's lives. I completely agree with that science have improve people' lives in different ways, such as medical sector, education sector, banking sector, and business sector.

Firstly, science can improve our daily lives easier. It helps us in different ways. People can use several types of devices in daily lives. It can make everything easier for human beings. We use Television to see news and we use Laptop and Computers to play games and watching movies. Through Mobile phones, we can communicate one place to another place easily, and it is all invented by science and technology. For example, before invention of Mobile phone people use letter to communicate, and it was carried by birds, also takes long time to reach destination. Hence, science can make life easier.

Similarly, science help in many sectors. In medical sector, X-ray machine, MRI machine, CT-scan machine, and many others have been invented by science, and it helps to live longer. However, science have improved education system. Nowadays, students used computers, electronic books, and various devices to gain knowledge. In banking sector, it make data safe from cyber attack, and also help to private customers detail. We can use ATM machine easily to debait money. For instance, people use science in all sector, either it is machine or electronic items. Thus, people are dependent on science to gain knowledge, to travel, and to make survive easily.

In conclusion, science improve our daily lives and make easier to survive in the world, and it also improve different sectors by invention of various machine and technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you completely agree that science should improve people’s lives, and you give relevant examples from communication, medicine, education and banking. The response therefore addresses the topic, but the reasons are often asserted rather than explained. For instance, you list X-rays, MRI and CT scans, then say they “help[] to live longer” without showing how these technologies improve diagnosis or treatment. The banking point about protecting data is also brief and unclear, and the essay does not consider whether science has other important aims or possible drawbacks. To strengthen the response, explain the impact of each example and connect it directly to why improving lives should be science’s most important aim; develop fewer examples in greater depth rather than listing many sectors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present examples, and a conclusion restates the position. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Similarly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the broad progression. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and the second body paragraph moves rapidly between medicine, education and banking without developing clear links between them. Some references are also difficult to follow, as in “it helps to live longer,” where “it” could refer to the machines or science generally. The conclusion repeats the main claim but adds little synthesis. Group related examples more clearly, use pronouns with precise references, and add linking sentences that explain how each example supports your central argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main examples, including “medical sector,” “electronic books,” “cyber attack” and “communicate.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated uses of “science,” “sector,” “machine” and “make.” Some word choices and forms are inaccurate, such as “technoly,” “debit money” (written as “debait money”), and “make survive easily,” which can make parts of the message harder to understand. Aim for more precise collocations and vary the vocabulary when describing benefits—for example, explain that technology enables people to access services, exchange information or receive earlier diagnoses. Check spelling and choose phrases that express the intended meaning directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with examples and linking clauses, so there is some variety in structure. However, errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction, and they sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “science have improve,” “science help,” “students used computers” in a present-day context, and “it make data safe.” The opening phrase “is to be improve” also has an incorrect verb pattern. Work on matching subjects and verbs, using consistent present tense for general facts, and forming infinitives correctly (“to improve”). Practise combining ideas into controlled sentences, then proofread each sentence for its subject, verb and article; this will make your examples clearer without requiring more complex structures.

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