Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The most important aim of scienc should be to improve people lifestyls.The thing is that science is an a technology that can make some medicine, technology, and transportation for individuals for their relaxacing life.I would agree with that statement that a science can do anything.

First of all, science had a significant numnber of medicien that we can used at our daily life.science can help to improve every individual health and increased expentency.scientist have discovered numerious item like vacniess,medicine e.t.c.Science has made a cancer medicine that we can see that easily.

Another vital benefit of science can make life easier and efficient.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a relevant position in the opening: “I would agree with that statement,” and identify medicine and easier living as reasons science can benefit people. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: the reasons are asserted rather than explained, and there are no developed examples showing how scientific advances improve lives. The claim that science “can do anything” is too broad to support your position, while the final point about making life “easier and efficient” is left unfinished. The response also does not meet the required minimum length, so there is not enough development to demonstrate a sustained answer. Explain your reasons, add specific examples, and conclude by restating your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you give your position first, introduce a reason with “First of all,” and begin another point with “Another vital benefit.” This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, there is no clear progression from one idea to the next, and the second body point is not developed. The paragraphing and transitions do not yet create a complete argument, while the abrupt ending leaves the response without a conclusion. Build each paragraph around one main idea, explain it, and connect it to the question. A concluding paragraph would help the reader follow your overall position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “science,” “medicine,” “transportation,” “health,” and “life,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “scienc,” “lifestyls,” “relaxacing,” “numnber,” and “expentency.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “science can do anything” is too sweeping, and “a cancer medicine” does not clearly describe a treatment or advance. Aim for accurate, specific terms and check spelling. For example, name a particular treatment or technology and explain its benefit rather than relying on broad claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements, with a limited attempt to link ideas in “that we can see that easily.” Frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning unclear. For example, “science had a significant numnber … that we can used” has an unsuitable tense and an incorrect verb form, while “scientist have discovered” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The opening also contains an incomplete or confused construction in “science is an a technology.” Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “daily life.science.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “for example.”

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