Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modren, times science techonlogy become more advanced as compared to previous technology because nowadays, it's helps people more frequently and precisely. Due to this reason majority of people thought that the main purpose of science advenments for improving their living condition and pratical skills such as in medical throghsides, hospitals has advance machinery which can helps in cure for different kinds of diseases.Morever, in the field of electrical sciences can helps people in different fields of deomastic, industural, home appliances and other types of electical eqipments thus, they can also provides cheap resources for production of electicty like solar energy, wind energy, heat energy and geothermal energy they also major part of our country economy. On the other side science also can play a vital role an agriculture needs of our country like different kinds of electrical equipments that are used in farm field for purpose of growing wheat, crops and vegetation.Furthermore science technology works day and night in industries and factories or other products that are used in making raw material for purification of foods and garments.As well as sceince advancement also play vital role in communication center in by this advancement people can easily communicate with their partner, family and friends if they are locate from long distance to their relatives they can talk access though this opportunity.Together, science also involve in protection of enviornment from harmful rays comes from atmosphere and traffics plloution.In conclusion I agree with the main purpose of science works which they perfom for our people accessible.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You take a clear position in the conclusion—“I agree”—and give several relevant ways science can improve lives, including medical treatment, energy, agriculture, communication, and environmental protection. This addresses the central question, and the range of examples shows an understanding of its scope. However, the position is not developed into a clear argument about why improving people’s lives should be science’s most important aim. Most examples are listed rather than explained; for instance, the discussion of renewable energy does not show how it benefits people or compare it with other possible aims of science. Some points, such as science’s role in the economy, are also left unclear. Develop fewer examples with specific explanations and connect each one directly to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable overall sequence: it introduces the topic, presents examples from several fields, and ends with a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other side” signal relationships between ideas. However, the body is presented as one long paragraph, and the examples move rapidly from medicine to electricity, agriculture, industry, communication, and the environment without clear grouping or progression. Several transitions are awkward or do not express the intended relationship, and repeated additions such as “also” make the writing feel list-like. Use separate paragraphs for the main argument and supporting examples, and organise them around a few connected reasons. Clearer referencing and more precise transitions would help readers follow how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical,” “solar energy,” “geothermal energy,” “agriculture,” and “communication,” and this gives the response some useful subject-specific range. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “people,” “different,” and “also,” while several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear—for example, “electrical sciences,” “communication center,” and “protection of environment.” Spelling errors such as “modren,” “techonlogy,” and “enviornment” are noticeable and sometimes make reading harder. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions for benefits, such as access to treatment or increased crop yields, would make your examples clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, so there is an effort to go beyond simple sentence patterns. However, many sentences are difficult to follow because of problems with sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “it's helps people” has incorrect agreement, while “hospitals has advance machinery which can helps” contains several errors in the same clause. The long sentence beginning “On the other side science also can play…” joins multiple ideas without clear punctuation, making the relationships hard to track. Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then add complex structures where you can control them. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, and punctuation when joining clauses.

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