Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Science are working for the wellfare of human's life but some time they also made some distructive things which is you to defend the country. however, The most significant aim of science should be to improve people's lives. I completely agree with that statement because it stop science to made the things which distroy humanities.

To begin with it's advantage that if science pay heed toward the improvement of life styles of the human it make the life of human easy and flexible. it made that things which make our life luxery and full of health. For instance, if the science made any machine which made our works easy it is a beneficial invention.

On the other hand, if science foces on the health of people it made many madicians and agricultural products that are beneficial for improving the quality of food. that also effect our average life and made as stronger then todays. As a result, we spent most of our time health and active which make as able to work continously. In addition, madicians also make as capable to fighting against the diseases which are not treated yet. For instance, if science made a madician of cancer it make as able to save the lifes of billions of people.

In conclusion, we should force the science to stop making an exclusives and other human distroctive things and encourage them to work on the wellness of world and espacially for human. So that we live togather like a union without any wars and fights.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you completely agree that science should prioritise improving people’s lives, and you address this through quality of life, health, food and disease treatment. The examples of useful machines and a possible cancer treatment are relevant, and the conclusion returns to your view. However, some points are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that science should stop producing “human destructive things” is important to your argument, but you do not give a specific example or explain how prioritising human welfare would prevent this. The discussion of agricultural products and longer, healthier lives also needs clearer development. Explain each example’s impact and connect it directly to your position to make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group related ideas, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “On the other hand” suggests a contrast, although the paragraph continues to support your position, and “that also effect our average life” has an unclear reference. The first paragraph also moves quickly from easier lifestyles to luxury and health without showing how these ideas relate. Use linking phrases that express the actual relationship between points, and make references explicit; a clearer sequence within each paragraph would strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “improvement,” “beneficial invention,” “quality of food,” and “diseases,” and you communicate the general argument despite a limited range. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “wellfare,” “distructive,” “madicians,” and “exclusives” obscure the intended meanings. Several phrases are also unnatural, such as “pay heed toward the improvement” and “spent most of our time health and active.” Repeated use of “made” and “make” limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms and collocations; for example, use “medical treatments” and “improve quality of life” in appropriate contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including conditional examples beginning “if science…” and a concluding sentence that expresses a desired outcome. However, control of these structures is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement is problematic in “Science are working” and “it make,” while tense and verb-form choices are unclear in “if the science made any machine.” Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention; for instance, “a cancer” and “the lifes” are not correctly formed, and “So that we live…” is an incomplete sentence in this context. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate present-tense statements and complete conditional sentences, then proofread for agreement and sentence completeness.

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