Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The most important aim of science should be to improve people lives. From the my point of view, I am agree with this statements, because the science also changed the human life style and thinking.

Before the science tecknology, the lives of people is difficulty, there is no facilitys, like refrigirator or many machine are not introduced in the past. There are no vehicle, cars or motorbikes and other vehicles they are used for the transportion in the modern life with the science technology. And the big machine, now they are used for the harvesting and farming but they are not invented in the past because the science is not introduce in the past..

The reason behind the why I am agree with the statement, science should improve the people's lives. Already I am discuss about the past difficulty when the science is nt introduce and use. After the science technology introduce and invented the most things and weapons and many machines, or the instruments are invented using the science technology. After the all things invented using the science technology, the life of peoples become easy and the people live happy using all the technology.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a clear position, agreeing that science should improve people’s lives, and you give relevant examples such as refrigeration, transport, and machinery for farming. These examples show an understanding of the topic, but they are mostly listed rather than explained, and the response does not explore other possible aims of science or develop a specific example in depth. The conclusion is also limited: it repeats that technology makes life easier and happier without adding a developed final point. The response contains 184 words, so it is 66 words below the required minimum; the 11 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Develop your reasons with explanation and examples to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall shape: it states your view, gives examples of life before and after technological advances, and returns to your main point. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long sentences, and the second and third paragraphs repeat the same claim about past difficulties and modern improvements. Connect each example to a distinct reason, and use clearer paragraphing—for instance, one paragraph on health and household technology and another on transport or farming. Linking phrases such as “Before science and technology” and “After these developments” provide some organisation, but repeated wording such as “using the science technology” makes the connections mechanical. Clearer sequencing and less repetition would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic topic-related vocabulary, including “transport,” “harvesting,” “farming,” “machines,” and “instruments,” so the reader can identify the examples you intend. However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “science technology,” “invented,” and “people’s lives.” Some inaccurate word choices and spelling errors make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “facilitys,” “refrigirator,” and “transportion.” Aim for more precise collocations and vary your vocabulary: for example, describe how scientific advances “transformed daily life” or “increased agricultural productivity.” Check spelling carefully and choose words that express the specific benefit, rather than relying on general terms such as “things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing communicates a consistent opinion, and you attempt to connect ideas using clauses such as “because the science also changed the human life style and thinking.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I am agree,” “the lives of people is difficulty,” and “the life of peoples become easy.” The sentence beginning “There are no vehicle” also has agreement problems and becomes difficult to manage as more examples are added. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.” Check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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