Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The aim of science was definitely improving the people's lives by many ways.For making our lifestyle healthy,we should be know about powefull weapons of science.they made our lives more easy and knowledgable. In every field, Science playing a great role of helping. On the one side, the very first role of biotechnology. it helps us in every aspect of life. For instance, someone were going through a very distress cough and fewer but the main reason no body knows the scientists collect the samples of blood in laboratory and perform some test on it and result were shown on the report that a few decline the level of plates or a kind of virus meet them in Malaria or dengue.Even today, biotechnology improves our way of living it combines biology and technoly to develop more recovery of human lives. On the other side,the main aim of improving lives better were inhabiting the bad habits of people like cigarratte and drinking alcohol they provide a complete flowchart of them that how both these were destroying someone health.Predominantly,these habits ere not gone easy but government provide some shelters for them to prevent these people from these and keep give them medicine for better their health and mind. As far as i'm concerned,the science not just helping in unique matters but also made everything more rare and valuable. In hospitals, they developed ECG,MRI and many other important machines and in operation theatre,some equipments remained manuall but all are changed into broadway. Overall,science becoming a important part of everyone's life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a generally supportive position, arguing that science improves health and quality of life, and you give relevant examples such as biotechnology, medical tests, and hospital equipment. These examples show an attempt to explain why science matters. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether improving people’s lives should be science’s most important aim. The discussion of discouraging smoking and alcohol use is difficult to follow, and the conclusion merely says science is important rather than restating your view about its priority. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly in the introduction and explain why this aim should take precedence over other possible aims, such as expanding knowledge or developing technology. Develop each example with a clear link to that argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an opening, two body sections introduced by “On the one side” and “On the other side,” and a concluding sentence. The examples are broadly grouped by topic, which gives the reader a basic route through the response. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear. The second body paragraph shifts from the harm caused by smoking and alcohol to government shelters and treatment without explaining the connection to science. Several sentences run together, and transitions such as “As far as I’m concerned” do not clearly signal how the final point relates to the earlier examples. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to your argument, and use accurate, varied linking phrases rather than relying on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “biotechnology,” “laboratory,” “virus,” “ECG,” and “MRI,” and these terms help convey a scientific context. There are also attempts to use less common expressions, such as “distress cough” and “flowchart,” but several choices are inaccurate or unclear, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. Spelling errors such as “powefull,” “technoly,” and “cigarratte” are noticeable, while phrases such as “more easy and knowledgable” do not express the intended idea naturally. Build a more reliable range of collocations for health and scientific progress, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise, familiar wording when you are unsure of a more advanced expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “For instance” that describes a medical example. However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, and clause structure. For example, “Science playing a great role” lacks a finite verb, while “someone were going through” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The opening also has an incomplete construction in “For making our lifestyle healthy, we should be know.” Articles and punctuation are inconsistent, and several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with clear punctuation. Check tense and agreement in every sentence, especially when describing general facts.

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