Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.I am highly agreed with that and i will elaborates it in the fourtcoming paragraph.

The most important and the major aim of science is to better the human's live like never before.For this aim science do many workes in the past years like making a portable electicity in the form of lethium cells and complete study of the renewable energy sources through we can produce the electricity, through the sun by its heat energy and produces this heat energy into the mechanical or electrical engery according to our demand.

Science also play an important role in the field of medical,through the different science experiments the health care system shows better results to the last decads through science we solve the problem of dangue by finds its vaccine.With the help of science we find some safety and the heigine precausions in the daily life.Through the science we fine applied physics experiment through we can able to make the dams that produces the massive enery that ever made by any human system, it is possible only with the help of the science and its branches.

The branches of science is also help us to make live easier then the before,like mathmetics change our life in different manners like in the daily bargening and the counting or in the managing peoples salaries and business,through easy managment the human brain feel relax aginst the troubles that fix the maths .

In my conclusion i am agreed with the science aims and i aslo exited what bring the next step science will do for the human beings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you strongly agree that science should aim to improve people’s lives, and the response stays relevant to the question. You support this view with examples from energy, medicine, public health, engineering and mathematics, including renewable energy and dengue vaccination. This addresses the task, but the examples are not equally developed. The medical and energy points are named without explaining their effects on people in much detail, while the mathematics paragraph shifts towards everyday calculation and management without clearly showing why this is a major aim of science. Develop fewer examples more fully, and explain how they improve quality of life. A more precise conclusion would also reinforce your main reasons rather than mainly expressing excitement about future science.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs on several areas of science, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a broad sense of progression from energy to medicine and other applications. However, links between ideas are often mechanical or unclear. Repeated openings such as “Through the science” and frequent use of “like” make the paragraphs feel list-like, while long sentences joined by commas and “through” obscure the relationship between points. For example, the energy discussion combines portable batteries, renewable sources and electricity generation in one sentence. Use clearer topic sentences, divide explanations into shorter units, and vary linking expressions so each example’s connection to the central argument is explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “renewable energy sources,” “health care system,” “vaccine” and “applied physics.” These choices show an effort to discuss several scientific fields. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “science,” “help” and “make,” and a number of inaccurate or misspelled forms make some phrases difficult to interpret, including “portable electicity,” “complete study” and “daily bargening.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “better the human’s live” and “massive enery.” Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. For instance, describe science as “advancing medical treatment” or “generating electricity,” rather than relying on broad phrases such as “do many works.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You make some attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences and use clauses to explain examples, but control is uneven, and many sentences contain errors that can make the meaning difficult to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “Science also play” and “the branches of science is,” while verb forms are inaccurate in “I am highly agreed” and “I will elaborates.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: the opening runs directly into the next sentence, and several long sentences are joined with commas rather than being separated. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with clear punctuation. Check agreement, verb forms and articles when editing; this will make your explanations easier to understand.

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