Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is no doubt that the science invents many things.With the increase of technology , the crucial aim of science is to improve the indiviwal life. I particially agree with this statement.

On the first hand , There are reasons why science has main target to improve the people's life .First and foremost reason is to create technological things. To describe it, science make many types of things that people enjoy it . for example, they generate self-driving cars .In that car public donot need any drivers because cars do self drive, it reduce the cost of drivers.They also create some technological things like mobile phones, laptops etcetra that inhabidents use for the entertainment . Addtionally, it helps improving the education , , To elucidate it , science improve the knowledge of children and the youth because when they start to learn about science they know about the nature and about their body ,which things is good or bad for them and how to treate the nature .These types of things they learn from science. These are some points that science improve public life.

On the other hand , there are some challanges that people can face . firstly , increase health issue , this mean that , individuals face many types of obstacles due to their health because before the technology people do the work themselves and do every single work with their hands and they was healthy but in modern era people are not very healthy and also suffer from many diseases and health issue . This are some points that dwellers can face .

In conclusion , science improve the public life and create technological things for better communication and also off springs increase their knowledge . however this science makes people very lasy and increase the health issue that cannot be ignored.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position by saying, “I partially agree,” and discuss both benefits and drawbacks, so the response is relevant to the question. The examples of self-driving cars, phones and laptops, and learning about nature and the body give the reader some support for your view. However, the position is not fully explained: the essay does not clarify which scientific aims should take priority or how the benefits compare with the health concerns. The point that people were healthier before modern technology is asserted rather than supported, and the conclusion mostly repeats earlier claims. Develop fewer points with clearer explanations and examples, and make your degree of agreement consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the first hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help identify these sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together without clear links. For example, the benefits paragraph moves from cars to entertainment and then education, while “These are some points that science improve public life” does not clearly connect or summarise the preceding ideas. Some transitions are also repetitive or awkward. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it before moving on; use referencing and linking phrases more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “self-driving cars,” “technology,” “education,” and “health issue,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For instance, “technological things” is vague, “inhabidents” appears to mean people or residents, and “off springs” is not an appropriate way to refer to young people. Spelling errors such as “particially,” “Addtionally,” and “lasy” are noticeable, and repeated use of “people,” “things,” and “science” limits precision. Build a more accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, such as the explanation beginning “because when they start to learn about science.” However, the range of structures is limited, and attempts to combine several clauses often lead to frequent errors that can make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “science make many types of things,” “it reduce the cost,” and “they was healthy,” where subject–verb agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “increase health issue” and the run-on sequence about people’s health in the modern era. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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