Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The most important goal of science should be to upgrade people's lives. If we look back a hundreds years ago, we can easily realise that how much progress science has brought to human kind. Science has given ourself speed and has taken our emotions as it's cost. Human civilization got it's own pace through science. Science touched every aspect of our lives and it has become more powerful and effective.

People used to travel by foot before the invent of transportation. We can travel around the whole world as well as the space through different kinds of transport . people used to die of many deadly dieseases like cancer or smallpox. But almost every chronic diseases are curable because of the advancement of treatment sector. Many medical equipments, medicine, operating system have been invented by the scientists.

Agricultural scientists are working relentlessly for increasing the food supply and food variants. Electricity is another blessing fot human civilization.

Artfilcial Intelligence is another remarkable invention of science. Time, cost, labour can be reduced on a large scale because of the use of artificial Intelligence in many sectors which was really unimaginable only a few years ago.

Despite so many positive aspects of science. tt has a lot of negative aspects also. Though it isn't the fault of science itself, people use it negatively. That's why it becomes negative in some cases. The invention of social media, it takes the young generation away from the books, creativity and reality. There is no privacy in people'e lives anymore. Because everything being shared in social media.

Perhaps ,some negative sides. In my opinion, the most important aim of science was to improve peoples lives ond still it is. Because we can,t think a single day without the things science invented.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is broadly clear: you agree that science should improve people’s lives, and you support this with examples from transport, medicine, agriculture, electricity and AI. These examples are relevant, but they are mostly listed rather than explained; for instance, you mention that medical advances make diseases curable without showing how this supports your view about science’s main aim. The discussion of drawbacks—social media, reduced reading and loss of privacy—adds balance, but its connection to the question is not fully developed. The conclusion repeats your position, though the phrase “Perhaps, some negative sides” makes it less decisive. Develop fewer examples in more depth and state clearly why improving lives should take priority over other scientific aims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall shape: an introduction, examples of benefits, a paragraph on disadvantages and a concluding opinion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often list-like, particularly where transport, disease, medical equipment, agriculture and electricity are introduced in quick succession. Some links are unclear or mechanically expressed, such as “Despite so many positive aspects of science. tt has a lot of negative aspects also,” where the full stop interrupts the contrast. The social-media point also moves abruptly from young people’s habits to privacy. Use clearer topic sentences, group related examples, and explain the relationship between each example and your central argument. Check that pronouns and linking phrases have clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “transportation,” “chronic diseases,” “food supply,” “electricity” and “artificial intelligence,” so the subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more expressive phrasing, such as “a blessing for human civilization.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “upgrade people’s lives” is less natural here than “improve people’s lives,” while “food variants” and “operating system” do not convey the intended ideas clearly. Errors such as “dieseases,” “Artfilcial” and “fot” are also distracting. Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing common collocations, and avoid using elevated phrases unless their meaning and fit are clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more complex forms, including a conditional idea (“If we look back…”) and a concession beginning “Though it isn’t the fault of science itself.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “we can easily realise that how much progress,” “People used to travel by foot before the invent of transportation,” and “Because everything being shared in social media,” which is an incomplete sentence. There are also problems with articles, plurals, agreement and punctuation, as in “a hundreds years ago” and “almost every chronic diseases are curable.” Practise complete sentence construction and check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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