Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The most cruicial work of science should br to enhance individual's lives .I totally agree with this statement.

To commence with, science education plays vital role in every's peole .education plays a important role for reveiling new things . To elaborate with , today we are up to date. we have everythings . for example , in past we dont have mobile or not technology we sent message through post men our messaged receivied large time. second thing's is that , now we have medicines , online facilities to communicate with doctors to tells problems and then solve the problems .To conclusion , science changed our lives and improve zero to hero.

Now we discuss more instances of this topic , now we have AI to automate our work like chwatgpt , google gemini , alexa , and more things and another things like we dont need teachers right now . some students take class onlines becuase centers are far away from home . online classes help to get more relaible and flexable to get education

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear position in the opening—“I totally agree”—and give relevant examples involving communication, medicine, AI and online learning. These show an understanding of how science can improve daily life. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the examples are listed briefly rather than explained, and the link between science and improved lives is not consistently developed. The claim that students “don’t need teachers right now” is broad and needs qualification or support. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words, so there is limited space to develop reasons and examples. To strengthen the answer, explain how each example benefits people and add a developed concluding position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with your opinion, introduce examples, and then add further examples in a later paragraph. Basic signposting such as “To commence with,” “for example,” and “Now we discuss more instances” helps indicate movement between points. However, the overall progression is not clear, and ideas often appear as a list rather than a connected argument. The phrase “To conclusion” occurs before the final paragraph, which disrupts the structure, while repeated use of “now” makes the links mechanical. Some references, such as “second thing’s,” are unclear. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a conclusion; connect each example explicitly to the main claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medicines,” “communicate,” “automate,” and “online classes,” and the reader can generally identify your intended examples. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “improve zero to hero” does not clearly express the intended idea, and “online facilities to communicate with doctors to tells problems” is imprecise. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “cruicial,” “reveiling,” “receivied,” and “flexable.” Build a more precise vocabulary for explaining benefits, such as access to healthcare, faster communication, and educational opportunities, and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer structures, including “some students take class onlines because centers are far away from home,” and use simple sentences to present your opinion and examples. However, the range of sentence forms is limited, and errors are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “science should br to enhance,” “science education plays vital role,” and “we dont have mobile,” where verb forms, articles, or sentence construction are not controlled. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, with several sentences joined or separated awkwardly. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add clauses with “because” or “which,” checking articles, verb agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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