Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Science is progressing day by day. One of the crucial aspect of science is the betterment of people's lives. I completely agree with point as science is widely used in the treatment of numerous diseases. Moreover, its significance in numerous fields encouraging the youth to select science subject.

One the one hand, whole world is coping with the fatal outcomes of many pathogenic diseases such as cancer. Science has progressed so much that it has made possible to treat numerous cancerous illnesses. Scientist have developed cost effective and quicker methods to treat such severe diseases. For instance, researchers in Pakistan are now working on plant extracts that have medical advantages to treat breast cancer. These extracts are easily accessible in the local markets and require less labor work to make medicine.

On the other hand, Science has a lot of branches in medical, engineering and other fields. All of these fields have a good scope in professional life also. Moreover, numerous educational institutes are now offering diplomas in science fields. For instance GIMES is a famous medical institute that is offering medical lab technician diploma for the matric students. These diploma holders are earning good professionally and at the same time they are now pursuing their higher education in the same field.

To conclude this, there is no doubt that science has helped humanity in solving challenges faced by cancer patients. Moreover its vast scope in other fields is encouraging students to choose science field which has both educational as well as work life advantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you completely agree that science should improve people’s lives, and the discussion of cancer treatment is relevant and supported with a specific example about research in Pakistan. However, the response does not fully develop the central question of what science’s most important aim should be. The second body paragraph shifts towards science’s career prospects and educational opportunities, which shows science’s wider value but does not explain as directly why improving lives should be its primary aim. Some claims, such as the benefits of the diploma, are also asserted rather than linked back to your argument. Develop both reasons around the stated priority and explain how each example supports it more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. The ideas are generally easy to follow, and examples are placed alongside the points they illustrate. However, the progression is not always fully logical: the second body paragraph moves from science’s branches to career prospects and then to a diploma example, without clearly connecting these points to the claim about improving lives. Some linking phrases, including “Moreover,” are repeated, and the contrast signalled by “On the other hand” is not clearly established. Make the relationship between each paragraph and your position explicit, and use transitions that reflect the actual connection between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “pathogenic diseases,” “cancerous illnesses,” “plant extracts,” and “medical advantages.” These choices help communicate the subject and show an attempt to use less common language. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, however, such as “the betterment of people’s lives,” “good scope in professional life,” and “less labor work.” There are also spelling or form issues, including “Scientist” where the plural is needed and “One the one hand.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim for familiar, accurate collocations rather than more elaborate phrases when you are unsure of their use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “as” and a relative clause in “a medical institute that is offering…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “One of the crucial aspect” needs plural agreement, while “I completely agree with point” is missing an article. In “its significance in numerous fields encouraging the youth,” the sentence lacks a finite verb, and “Moreover its vast scope” needs punctuation after the introductory word. There are also agreement and article problems in “Scientist have developed” and “science field.” Check that each sentence has a complete verb structure, and review articles, plurals, and subject–verb agreement.

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