Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Science is one of the fundamental part of life. It studies life, experiments with it and gives us the reasonable explanation behind it. It defines nature and all the happenings around us. From dusk till dawn, its immense is huge. The evolution of human civilization was only possible due to the blessings of science. From the discovery of fire to the present era of Artificial Intelligence, all was possible due to the advancement of science. And if we take a look back at these incidents, then we will be able to see a pattern. A pattern which defines all the innovations of science. And it is none other than the improvement of people's life. If it wasnt for peoples benefit, then science wont be that advance that we see nowadays.The invention of wheel, electricity all happened with the intention of making people's life good. On the other hand just like all other things, everything has a bad side. Science is not an exception too. If we take a look at the war, we can see the bad effects of science. The use of arms, grenades, tanks all other things was invented only to kill people. One may think that it was made to protect the sovereignity of the country. But does it really do that?. It kills people, burns out tax money. No wonder how many scientists were killed only for that which led to the distint of many inventions. One can also think in such a way that, the money that was used to spend on these can be spend on different research fields which will ultimately lead to the betterment of science and people's life. Thus we can say that science's advancement is only possible through improving people's live not destroying

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position that science should benefit people, while acknowledging that it can also be used destructively. The examples of the wheel, electricity, and weapons are relevant, and the suggestion that military spending could support other research begins to explain your reasoning. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the benefits are asserted broadly, and the argument about weapons is not supported with a specific example or a fuller explanation of how science can improve lives. The opening also spends considerable space defining science rather than directly establishing your answer. Develop two or three central reasons in more depth and make your degree of agreement explicit in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a recognisable overall movement from the importance of science to its benefits and then its harmful uses, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal a contrast. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the stages of the argument are difficult to follow. Several short statements repeat or restart an idea—for example, “A pattern. A pattern which defines…”—rather than advancing it. Some links are also awkward, and the final sentence ends abruptly, leaving the conclusion incomplete. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting benefits, counterpoint, and conclusion; connect each paragraph with clear references to the argument, and ensure the ending directly answers the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “evolution of human civilization,” “Artificial Intelligence,” “invention,” and “research fields,” which helps communicate the subject. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making the intended meaning unclear. Examples include “its immense is huge,” “the distint of many inventions,” and “improving people's live.” There are also spelling errors such as “sovereignity” and “wasnt,” alongside repeated use of “people's life” and “science.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases before choosing more ambitious vocabulary: for instance, describe science’s “impact” or “contribution,” and refer to “people’s quality of life.” Proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including conditional sentences such as “If it wasnt for peoples benefit…” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” These attempts show some range, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction appear in examples such as “one of the fundamental part,” “all was possible,” and “the money that was used to spend.” Punctuation also causes problems, particularly in “But does it really do that?.” and where sentences run together without clear boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences with subordinate clauses, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb patterns. Clearer sentence boundaries will make your reasoning easier to understand.

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