Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days science have a one foremost aim that is improving individual's lives.I completly agree withi this statement however there are other reason would be consider as the aim of science.

There are many factors which contribute that how sceince improve life of the people.One of the most contributing factor is give a prediction about situations.Nowadys sceince give a various prediction through their technology and sceince power.As they introduced a lot of softwares and methods regarding weather or any life threatning condition which helpful for people.Who will suffer from this, as a consequently they can follow their prediction and looking for precaution from them.Which makes teir life more easier.Another compelling reason is high range of equipment and machines in healthcare system.Which makes the healthcare profession more standarble and easier.These days sceince introduce a lot of xray and scanning machines which are not only helpful for people but also give benifit to the doctors.Due to these machines they can indetify the problem and going with better solution.A recent survey conducted in India which showed a sceince introduce a varous equipment for improving healthcare sytem from last couple of years.

However,it put a profund effects on people's lives in terms of paying more dpendency towrds to science.AS they consider sceince is the result for every problem.so they might be feel over depedent on science .They are not putting efforts from their mind just because of science which makes them less confident and fully dependent in their future.Thus sceince makes them more lazy and less confident in their future.

In conclusion,Although science would try to makes people's lives more easier and improved with the help of prediction system and upgraded healthcare sytem,while it makes them dependent on sceince which will not be benificial in their future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that improving people’s lives should be science’s foremost aim, while acknowledging a possible drawback. The examples about weather warnings and medical scanning equipment are relevant and show how science can protect people and support diagnosis. However, the discussion of the opposing point—that reliance on science can reduce confidence and effort—is less fully explained, and the claim that science has other aims is introduced but not developed. The healthcare survey is also mentioned without details that would show how it supports your point. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of each example more precisely and clarify how your qualification fits your overall position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on benefits, a paragraph on dependence, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your main line of argument. You also use linking expressions such as “Another compelling reason,” “However,” and “In conclusion.” At times, though, connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Which makes the healthcare profession more…” is a fragment, and “Although… while…” in the conclusion combines linkers in a confusing way. Several ideas in the benefits paragraph are crowded together, with unclear references such as “from this.” Use complete sentences, make pronouns refer clearly to their subjects, and organise each paragraph around one main point with a clear explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “prediction,” “precaution,” “healthcare system,” “equipment,” and “dependent.” These choices help communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several word forms, spellings, and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. Examples include “science power,” “high range of equipment,” “standarble,” and “benificial”; these make parts of the argument harder to understand. “Science” is also repeated frequently where more precise terms such as research, technology, or medical advances could be used. Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would make your examples clearer and your argument more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “As” and “Although,” and the main ideas can generally be understood. However, control is uneven, particularly in longer sentences. For example, “These days science have a one foremost aim” has errors in subject–verb agreement and article use, while “they can follow their prediction and looking for precaution” does not maintain a consistent verb pattern. Some sentences beginning with “Which” are incomplete, and punctuation is often missing after sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationship is clear. Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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