Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

enviromental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. for me, i really agreed with this statement. nowadays, there are so many species and plants loss.

firstly, iam agree with this statement because this is very important if we loss some species of plants and animals. we still need to introduce and look after the enviroment for our children. and if we still loss some species, this is a big problems for our furture.

secondly, as i know about my country indonesia. we have so many species of animals that only in indonesia. example like, sumatra tiger, kalimantan orang utan. there are some species that only indonesia have. and this is will be a good chance also for present our country to worldwide. and will bring tourist for visit indonesia to see the species that only indonesia have.

in conclusion, i would say this is a big problems for the furture if we cant look after the species or we keep lose the species. maybe other than that we also have a other problems about enviromental, like example the culture or as easy as languages. but for me losing species of plants and animals is also a big problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—“for me, i really agreed”—and give relevant examples from Indonesia, including the Sumatran tiger and orangutan. However, the task asks you to discuss both the view that species loss is the main problem and the view that other environmental problems are more important. Your response focuses almost entirely on species loss; the brief reference to “other problems” does not explain what they are or why they may matter more. The reasons about children, tourism, and the future are also only briefly developed. The response contains 191 words, so it is 59 words below the 250-word minimum; 14 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both sides and support each with specific explanation or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening, two body paragraphs signalled by “firstly” and “secondly,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the general topic, and the Indonesia examples are grouped together. However, progression is limited because both body paragraphs mainly repeat the same argument that species loss is serious, rather than developing distinct sides of the discussion. Linking is also mechanical: “firstly,” “secondly,” and “in conclusion” do most of the work, while connections between claims are sometimes unclear, as in “and will bring tourist.” The final mention of culture and languages is not connected clearly to environmental problems. Build paragraphs around separate points of the debate and use clear references and transitions to show how each idea relates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “species,” “plants and animals,” “environment,” and “tourist,” and the examples of the tiger and orangutan make the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “species,” “big problems,” and “only Indonesia have.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “enviromental,” “furture,” and “present our country to worldwide,” which make some expressions difficult to interpret naturally. Aim to use more precise environmental vocabulary and accurate collocations, such as describing species as “endemic to Indonesia” or saying that they “attract visitors.” This would make your ideas clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main point using mostly short, simple sentences, and you attempt to connect ideas with “because” and “if.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “i really agreed with this statement” does not use the appropriate present-tense form for your current opinion, while “this is a big problems” has a singular–plural mismatch. The sentence “and this is will be a good chance” also combines verb forms incorrectly. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase sentence openings and “i.” Practise forming accurate sentences with a subject and verb, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses such as “If these species disappear, …”

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