Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often debated that the major environmental issue in current era is loss of particular species of plants and animals, whether others have the different point of view. They think there are so many other crucial environmental problems. This essay will discuss both views and I will explain, why I strongly agree with the second.

The major reason why people think it is important to protect species of plants and animals from loss because these all are the part of our environment and its our responsibility to provide protection. The habit of people to cut unnecessary forests and hunting the animals excessively. People think that these things are crucial for biodiversity survival. If we can do such things this will make huge issue such as cutting to many trees cause loss of complete habitate and the animals & other species migration. During migration if they didn't found any suitable place to relocate most of them will die by hunting others or killing by humans. On the other hand the consequences of cutting plants are many such as lack of oxygen and carbon dioxide and the loss of many animals living place where they usually save themselves from hunters. Some of the trees are even 100 years old or more contributed in environment but if they cut them the new plants will take time to grow or even they can be die by diseases. The reasons why they think it is important are explained; however, even these are not the major environmental problem but this is alaraming situation so government should focus on it.

On the other hand the people who think there are other many problems, they usually say this based on the pollution which cause many problems such as the higher air quality index, health issues and many other problems for species like marine. The reason of thinking that why these are significant problems fo our environment is because the pollution is leading issue which causing multiple problems. Pollution effect not just plants and animals but also humans too. Due to pollution the air quality goes down and when people breath in this polluted air, they got infected. Furthermore, the plastic and other waste drained into rivers reached in occean and then make problems for marine and corals. For instance, fishes stuck in these or sometimes these plastic work as a sharp cutting material and damage marines and some of these things block corals or damage reefs. These problems are major and all of these are assosiated with each others thats why i believe government should work on all of these problems because its curcial to solve these issues.

Overall, the both type of viewers have own mind and think according the knowledge that they have and i think both are important but the people who think there are many other major problems than the loss of specific species of plants and animals have more valid reasoning.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for the view that other environmental problems are more important. The discussion of species loss includes relevant consequences, such as habitat destruction and animals being forced to migrate, while the pollution paragraph explains effects on people, marine life and coral reefs. These examples show a relevant response to the task. However, the two positions are not developed equally: the first view receives a long list of consequences, while the case for pollution is asserted more than compared with species loss. Your conclusion says both matter and that the second view has “more valid reasoning,” but does not clearly explain why it is more important overall. Develop that comparison and support the central judgement more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “On the other hand,” “Furthermore,” and “For instance” help readers follow the shift between arguments and examples. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and some references are unclear. For example, “these things” and “these” in the discussion of plastic waste do not always identify precisely which actions or materials you mean. The first main paragraph also moves through several consequences without a clear hierarchy, and the final sentence repeats the idea that both views matter rather than synthesising the comparison. Use clearer topic sentences, group related effects, and make links between claims and examples more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of environmental vocabulary, including “biodiversity,” “pollution,” “marine,” “corals,” and “habitat,” which helps communicate the topic. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “air quality index” and “plastic and other waste.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less precise: “higher air quality index” does not clearly express worsening air quality, “loss of complete habitate” is awkward, and “alaraming,” “occean,” and “assosiated” are misspelled. Some expressions are also vague or unnatural, such as “other many problems” and “plastic work as a sharp cutting material.” Build precision by checking collocations and spelling, and choose terms that describe the environmental effects directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and subordinate structures such as “If we can do such things…” and “when people breath in this polluted air…”. This gives the response some structural variety, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, errors in sentence formation, agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation occur across the response. For example, “The major reason … because” creates an incomplete construction, while “the pollution is leading issue which causing multiple problems” lacks the necessary article and verb form. In “the animals & other species migration,” the relationship between the nouns is unclear. Practise building complete clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms; this will make your complex sentences more controlled and easier to follow.

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