Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

If is often argued that the extinction of several organisms is the main environmental issue of our time while others believe that there are more important environmental challenges. From my perspective, although loss of various species is one of the most serious issues, there are more important environmental problems such as water and soil pollution to focus on.

Due to changes in ecosystem, many fishes and animals are being extincted daily and many of the remaining organisms are in risk of being lost from the Earth. Materials of the environment such as soil, water and air are being polluted daily and that results directly in the ecosytems. As a consequence, many species are losing their habitants along with the required place for breeding which is not only preventing their breeding process but also slowing their population growth. For instance, water pollution destroys habitants of various types of water species that leads to the extinction of these species..

People throw wastes on ponds, rivers, oceans that causes water pollution as well as the destruction of whole ecosystem of that ponds or rivers. Soil is the another important element of the world which is being polluted reguarly in various ways such as throwing plastic wastes, applying pesticides, burrying chemical wastes. Micro organisms that live in the soil face difficulties due to soil pollution and many of them leave their habitants.Water and soil contamination are the main problems that cause issues such as loss of species and destruction of habitants. Therefore, if these problems are solved, other related problems will be solved automatically.

In conclusion, the extinction of organisms is a serious problem but to solve these problem, people fave to focus on more important problems such as water and soil pollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and make your position clear: species loss is serious, but pollution of water and soil is more important to tackle. The explanation that pollution damages habitats and breeding conditions gives relevant support, and the examples of waste and pesticides help ground your argument. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The case for species loss is mostly explained through its links to pollution, rather than showing why species loss itself might be considered the main problem. Your own view is clearer, but the claim that solving pollution will resolve related problems “automatically” is broad and needs qualification or evidence. Develop the competing view more directly and explain the wider consequences of pollution to make the discussion more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction states your position, the body paragraphs explain environmental impacts, and the conclusion restates your view. Ideas generally follow a sensible cause-and-effect sequence, particularly when you connect pollution with habitat loss and declining species populations. Some links, however, are mechanical or unclear. For example, “As a consequence” and “Therefore” signal relationships, but the connection between the first paragraph’s discussion of species loss and the next paragraph’s focus on pollution could be made more explicit. The second body paragraph also combines examples of water and soil pollution with a broad conclusion, making its progression less controlled. Use clearer topic sentences and refer back precisely to the ideas already introduced.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of environmental vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “pesticides,” “contamination,” “breeding process,” and “population growth.” These terms help communicate the topic, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several inaccurate word forms, spelling errors, and collocations reduce precision: “extincted,” “in risk,” “habitants,” and “burrying” are not appropriate forms in these contexts. “Materials of the environment” is also an imprecise way to refer to natural resources or environmental elements. Some wording is repetitive, especially the repeated references to pollution and problems. Aim to learn environmental terms in natural combinations and check spelling and word forms; this would make your vocabulary more accurate and flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses of cause and result, as in “which is not only preventing their breeding process but also slowing their population growth.” This shows some ability to extend sentence structures, and the main message is usually clear. There are nevertheless some errors in sentence formation and grammatical patterns. For example, “If is often argued” lacks a subject, while “many fishes and animals are being extincted” uses an incorrect verb construction. In “People throw wastes on ponds, rivers, oceans that causes,” the relative clause and subject–verb agreement are faulty. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “the another important element.” Review sentence boundaries and agreement, and practise accurate passive forms and relative clauses.

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