Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some individuals believe that the current main environmental issue is the diminish of endangered species while others argue that there are more considerable environmental challenges. In my opinion, I think other problems are more important than the loss of particular species, but it also has its own significance.

According to the one view, the endangered species can break the food chain for many animals due to its unavailability. Moreover, the habitat of many species are finishing and in danger because there is a drastic increase in the human population, so that people are ruining the forests to make societies for living. Additionally, they are cutting the trees and subsequently using it in their daily life, such as, woods are used in making food, furniture and houses.

On the contrary, other environmental problems like, air pollution, water pollution, rainforest, etc. are more essential and I also support this because these issues affect every creature. For instance, marine life, plants, birds and even homo-sapiens are facing difficulty due to all these obstacles. Many waterborne diseases arise when people throw waste materials into the oceans, river and ponds other than that it disturbs the marine life. Smog is rising each year in the Lahore and other cities of Punjab and citizens face a lot of difficulties. For example, the eyes, throat and skin badly affect from it, even the educational institutes and offices remained close in smog season and in night or evening residence barely see anything in open areas.

In conclusion, I strongly stand with the others environmental issues because they are crucial to all living organisms, Whereas we should also keep the species safe that are less in quantity, such as tigers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and make your position clear: you consider species loss important but argue that broader environmental problems affect more living things. The discussion of habitat destruction and food chains is relevant, while the examples of water pollution and smog in Lahore help support your preferred view. This meets the task well, though the two sides are not developed equally: the first view is explained mainly through habitat loss and a brief food-chain point, and the second would benefit from clearer comparison of why these problems are more urgent or widespread. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of species loss in more detail and connect each example explicitly to your overall argument. Your conclusion restates your position, but could synthesise the comparison more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction presents both views and your opinion, separate body paragraphs discuss each side, and a conclusion returns to your position. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “On the contrary” help signal progression. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. In the pollution paragraph, “other than that” joins ideas awkwardly, and “air pollution, water pollution, rainforest, etc.” does not establish a clear category or sequence. The long sentence about smog also combines several effects without enough separation. Use more precise transitions and divide related points into shorter, logically connected sentences. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow which environmental problems “these issues” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “food chain,” “habitat,” “marine life,” “waterborne diseases,” and “smog,” which makes the subject clear. There are also attempts at less common or formal language, such as “drastic increase” and “crucial.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “the diminish of endangered species,” “habitat … are finishing,” and “more considerable environmental challenges” do not express the intended meanings naturally. “Rainforest” is also unclear in the list of environmental problems. These choices do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision. Focus on learning common environmental collocations and checking whether a word has the correct form and meaning in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including cause-and-effect clauses with “because” and “so that,” and a conditional-style explanation of pollution’s effects. The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the habitat of many species are” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the eyes, throat and skin badly affect from it” needs a passive construction. There are also issues with articles and number in “in the Lahore,” “oceans, river and ponds,” and “the others environmental issues.” Punctuation in the long smog sentence makes the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Aim for more accurate agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries while retaining your complex structures.

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