Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people say that the main enviromental problem of our time is the loss of prticular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important enviromental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

On the one hand, the loss of prticular species of plants and animals. Many plants and animals die due to deforestation, distruction and hunting. Human beings cutting a lot of plants to built their houses but it is very dangerous of both animals and human beings because we cannot breath if there is no plants. In Pakistan, Markhors and loins are not safe. Every animal and plant is very important for over life. Such as if there is no bee some crops cannot grow.

On the other hand, some people says that envriomental problems are more important. Yeah, it is right enviroment problem is much important than the other problem. Because there are many cases come out that enviroment pollution like water pollution, air pollution and global warming etc kill a lot of humans, animals and plants. In karachi, air pollution cause breathing disease which kill many peoples. Water is neccessary for all humans, animals and plants. If the water is polluted then how will they survive. Global warming affect weather. Now a days in pakistan, the summer is extreme hot and the winter is not very cold.

In my opinion, the biggest problem is enviroment problem which must need some solution. Beacause enviromental kill all humans, animals and plants. By solving this problem we can a lot of lifes.

In conclusion, both views are valid, but I believe that climate change and pollution should be given meor priority because it will affect both humans and wildlife.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your opinion: the first body paragraph discusses species loss, while the second and conclusion favour pollution and climate change. Relevant examples include bees’ role in crops, Markhors in Pakistan, and air pollution in Karachi. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The first view is supported mainly by brief claims, and the explanation of how species loss affects people is unclear; the second view lists several problems but does not compare their importance in depth. Your position is also expressed inconsistently: you call environmental problems “much important” and later identify them as the biggest problem, but the distinction between these problems and species loss needs clearer explanation. The response includes 46 words copied from the task prompt; these are not counted toward the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with separate paragraphs for each view, your opinion, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the two sides, and the examples generally appear beside the point they support. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes weak: the first paragraph moves from deforestation to breathing, then to Pakistani wildlife and bees without fully connecting these points. Some linking is repetitive or mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “because” and “if.” The opinion paragraph also repeats the claim that environmental problems are the biggest concern rather than developing the reasoning. Use clearer links between cause, consequence, and example, and make the conclusion follow directly from the comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “deforestation,” “water pollution,” “air pollution,” “global warming,” and “wildlife.” The examples also show an attempt to use specific terms such as “Markhors” and “crops.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “enviromental,” “distruction,” “loins,” and “neccessary.” Some phrases are unnatural or unclear, such as “many cases come out” and “we can a lot of lifes.” Repetition of “problem,” “important,” and “pollution” also limits variety. Build a more accurate set of environmental collocations and check spelling, while choosing words that express the intended relationship precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and you attempt some longer sentences with “because” and “if.” These attempts show an effort to explain causes and consequences, but control is inconsistent. For example, “Many plants and animals die due to deforestation, distruction and hunting” is followed by the faulty construction “Human beings cutting a lot of plants”; a finite verb is needed. There are also agreement and form errors in “some people says,” “air pollution cause,” and “Global warming affect weather.” The fragment “On the one hand, the loss of particular species…” lacks a main clause, while “By solving this problem we can a lot of lifes” is incomplete. Practise complete clauses, subject–verb agreement, and varied sentence patterns, then proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries.

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