Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some individuals believe that the main environmental issue of current time is the extinction of various species of plants and animals. While other group of people think that there are various other essential environmental issues. In my point of view, there are a lot of other factors like pollution which affect our environment and climate including loss of some organisms.

In view of some citizens, a big problem we are facing today which disturbs our environment is the loss of some species of animals and plants. Extinction of a particular organism is a reason of many problems for example, an animal species prays on other animal which maintains the population of species which is being eaten. But if predator specie is died this cause the rise of population of other species which is an environmental concern. So, by seeing this we can say that, yes animal species extinct is a huge problem for environment. Same situation with plants if we see at the loss of some plants which was a major source of oxygen and food for living organisms.

On the other hand, some individuals believe that there are various other factors which affects the environment like pollution, deforestation and overpopulation. Such factors play big role in ruining the ecosystem. If we talk about pollution and deforestation these are main factors. Pollution destroys the environment by noise, rubbish on land or water bodies and emissions of harmful gases in air. While deforestation is concerning for both animals and humans as destruction of forests means ruining of oxygen and food. Furthermore, overpopulation also plays an important role in harming the environment because of human pollution increases, the demand of land for living also increases which encourage people to cut down forests for shelter.

In conclusion, I strongly agree that other factors which are pollution, deforestation, and overpopulation is a danger for ecosystem while these factors are cause of the extinction of plants and animals species.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views and state a clear opinion: you recognise species loss as serious, while arguing that pollution, deforestation and overpopulation are broader concerns. The predator–prey example and the link between forest destruction, food and oxygen give relevant support. However, some points are less fully explained than others. The discussion of species loss focuses mainly on population imbalance, and the plant example is brief; the other-problems paragraph lists several issues but could explain more precisely how they compare in scale or impact. Your conclusion restates your position, but the claim that these factors cause extinction could be connected more explicitly to why they are the greater overall concern.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The progression from species loss to other environmental pressures is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help orient the reader. This already shows effective organisation, but cohesion is not consistently smooth. Several transitions are mechanical, including repeated use of “if we talk about” and “because,” while “So, by seeing this” is an awkward link to the point that follows. Some references are also unclear, such as “these factors” in the conclusion. To strengthen progression further, use more precise links between cause and consequence and make each paragraph’s central comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of environmental vocabulary, including “extinction,” “predator,” “ecosystem,” “deforestation” and “emissions of harmful gases.” These terms help communicate the topic, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise or repetitive, which limits flexibility and naturalness. Examples include “main environmental issue of current time,” “a reason of many problems,” “ruining the ecosystem,” and “a danger for ecosystem.” Some expressions, such as “various other essential environmental issues,” repeat broad wording rather than naming a precise impact. Aim to learn common academic collocations and choose specific verbs—for example, describe how pollution “contaminates” air and water or how habitat loss “threatens” species.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures, and the main ideas can generally be followed. However, some errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction remain. For example, “other group of people think” needs a plural subject, while “these are main factors” needs an article. In “if predator specie is died this cause,” the verb pattern and agreement are faulty; similarly, “factors which affects” does not match its plural subject. The final sentence also has an unclear structure: “these factors are cause of the extinction.” Work on checking subject–verb agreement and building clauses around a clear subject and verb. More accurate complex sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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