Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the current times,enviromental problems have become a serious headache.There are different theories about its causes,some say the extinction of some species of plants and animals has played major role in the growth of this problem.In comparison to this, some say there are different reason for this like for instance the smoke coming out from cars,bikes, buses etc.There is a big debate surrounding this topic and this essay will analyze this problem then will provide my own personal opinion.

First of all we will talk about the theory,that these problems have increased due to the the loss of certain species of animals and plants.This can be the cause, as plants are famously known as the main source of oxygen and keeping the enviroment clean.However,there isn't a solid proof for this theory.For example,i recently learned from a book that the main source of oxygen are the plants which are in the seas and oceans.As for the case of animals,there hasn't been a targic incident recorded in history that was due to the reason of dissapearance of a certain animal.

In contrast to this, there are certain reasons that have played a major role in affecting the enviroment.Firstly the smoke emitted from automobiles or due to the burning of material,crops and other.The smoke that releases from these process has carbondioxide and other harmful chemicals that affect our air,by making it polluted.Secondly,the waste products released from the factories.Mostly these waste are released into a river or a lake which not only kills the aquatic life,but also makes that water toxic.For example,my uncle's village was near a beautiful lake.But a factory opened there,it not only polluted that lake but also made the land infertile.

To sum it up,while plants and animals are importent for enviroment,but loss of some doesn't affect the enviroment hugely.The thing that does affect it majorly are certain human creation.So in my personal opinion it is better to protect the enviroment by using enviromental friendly products.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear opinion: you argue that human activities such as vehicle emissions and factory waste are more damaging than the loss of individual species. The examples of oxygen-producing plants and the polluted lake help make the discussion relevant. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The claim that no animal disappearance has caused a recorded tragedy is broad and does not explain why species loss may still be a serious environmental problem, while the alternative problems receive more specific explanation. Your conclusion restates your position, but the recommendation to use environmentally friendly products is not fully connected to the factory-waste example. Develop the first view more carefully and support comparisons with clearer reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “In contrast,” and “To sum it up” make the progression easy to follow, and the lake example is placed where it supports the discussion of industrial pollution. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some features of stronger progression. However, several transitions feel formulaic, and some links between ideas are not fully clear. For instance, the move from plants as an oxygen source to the claim that there is no solid proof is abrupt. Use more precise referencing and explain how each example supports the point, rather than relying mainly on signposting phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “extinction,” “harmful chemicals,” “aquatic life,” and “infertile.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “enviromental,” “targic,” “dissapearance,” and “importent.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “serious headache,” “the smoke that releases from these process,” and “human creation” do not fit the intended meaning smoothly. Repetition of general terms such as “problem,” “things,” and “affect” further limits flexibility. Build a more accurate set of environmental collocations and check spelling carefully; this will make your ideas clearer without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “as,” “which,” and “while,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. Some sentence structures are effective, such as the explanation that factory waste “not only kills the aquatic life, but also makes that water toxic.” However, there are some errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “There are different theories about its causes,some say” joins two independent clauses with only a comma, and “the loss of certain species … has played major role” needs an article before “major role.” In “these waste are released,” the noun and verb do not agree. Improve sentence separation and proofread these patterns; greater control would make the complex sentences more consistently clear.

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