Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, A small number of individual argues that the main ecosystem problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animal. Which is a fact that i agree. Similarly, Other people discuss that there are more crucial environmental issues. For instance, Global warming, factories waste and climate change.

Firstly, Main ecosystem issue which is believed by some of individual is loss of species of plants and animal. For instance, Number of birds in our environment has been decreased due to a high radio frequency waves. Which our telecom industry is using to provide us 4G/LTE services. Moreover, We will see more decline in birds in coming years because of 5g is being introduced. Factory waste such as chemical which are being dumped into the rivers is dangerous for the marina life. A lot of cases have seen deep sea ocean animals are coming upper surface of ocean which is evidence it is hurting the aquatic species.

In Contrast, Numerous other crucial issues are there. a lot of city residents in Karachi use there private vehicles rather then using a public transport. residents use there private cars because public transports condition is worse in Karachi. Government started a new project from safora to Saddar but they haven't completed that in last 4 years. In addition, The dust from that road due to on-going construction is reducing the quality of air which leads to breathing problem in many people.

In Conclusion, Loss of particular species or other environmental problem both leads to manage the environment. Nevertheless, Each individual action is crucial to decrease the environment problem. small actions make big achievements. We should plant more trees, use recycle bags and do whatever to save the environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views and give a personal position, especially by agreeing that species loss is a serious problem and then describing other concerns in Karachi. The examples about birds, aquatic life, traffic and construction dust are relevant. However, the response only partially develops the comparison: the claim about radio-frequency waves affecting birds is asserted without support, and the Karachi example focuses more on transport and air quality than on explaining why these problems are more important than species loss. Your conclusion says both types of problems matter, but does not clearly resolve which view you consider more convincing. Develop each side with clearer reasoning and make your final opinion explicit. The response meets the required length; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “In Contrast,” and “In addition” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Which is a fact that i agree” is separated from the preceding sentence, while “A lot of cases have seen deep sea ocean animals…” does not clearly connect the evidence to the claim. Capitalisation also interrupts the flow. Use complete sentences, make the relationship between each example and its point explicit, and link the conclusion more directly to the position stated in the introduction.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “species,” “telecom industry,” “chemical,” “aquatic,” “construction,” and “quality of air.” This gives you enough language to address environmental issues and provide examples. However, the range is limited in places, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, which can make meaning harder to follow. Examples include “main ecosystem problem,” “radio frequency waves,” “marina life,” and “small actions make big achievements.” There are also spelling and form errors, such as “transports condition” and “there” for “their.” Aim for more precise environmental terms and check common collocations and spelling; this will make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “Which is a fact that i agree” is a fragment, and “Number of birds … has been decreased” has problems with the article and verb construction. In “A lot of cases have seen…,” the subject does not fit the intended meaning. Review sentence boundaries and practise building complete clauses with accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms. Consistent punctuation and capitalisation will also improve readability.

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