Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, some people believe that the major environmental issue is the vanish of certain species of plants and animals, while others argue that there are more crucial environmental problems. This essay will examine the both perspectives before presenting my own view.

One of the main reasons is that decline of any species of plants or animals can hamper the ecosystem. Recently, many people are cutting down a large amount of trees which leads to reduce the oxygen supply and also damage the habitat of some animals. As a result, it affects the food chain of the ecosystem. For instance, in Shundarban, which is the biggest forest in Asia, underwent a substantial deforestation. So that, numerous animals were endengered such as tigers, deers, and birds and these causes a serious affects on biodiversity.

On the other hand, there are enormous significant environmental problems beyond the loss of species of plants and animals. Firstly, air pollution is one of the most important problem as it causes several health illness to people. subsequently, noise pollution also considered

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both viewpoints and give a relevant reason for concern about species loss, linking deforestation to habitats, food chains and biodiversity. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the second view is merely introduced, with air and noise pollution named but not explained, and your own opinion is not stated. The Sundarban example is relevant, but its details are unclear and it does not fully support a developed argument. The response is also below the required 250 words, leaving too little space to discuss both views and give a reasoned position. To improve, explain why other environmental problems may be more urgent, add a specific example, and state and support your own view in a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic essay shape: an introduction, a paragraph supporting concern about species loss, and a transition to other environmental problems. Phrases such as “On the other hand” help signal a change in viewpoint, and “For instance” introduces an example. However, the discussion stops partway through the second viewpoint, so there is no clear overall progression to a conclusion or final position. Some links are inaccurate or awkward, including “So that” after the Sundarban example, while “subsequently” does not clearly show the relationship between air and noise pollution. Develop each paragraph around a complete point, use linking expressions to show precise relationships, and finish with a concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “habitat,” “food chain,” “deforestation,” and “biodiversity,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “crucial environmental problems” and “substantial deforestation.” However, several word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural: “the vanish of certain species,” “a serious affects,” and “health illness” make parts of the message less clear. Spelling errors such as “endengered” and “Shundarban” also reduce accuracy. Build a reliable range of environmental collocations and check word forms and spelling; for example, use “the disappearance of species,” “serious effects,” and “health problems.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “Recently, many people are cutting down… which leads…” and a subordinate clause beginning “as it causes…”. However, errors occur frequently, and some sentence structures are incomplete or difficult to follow. For example, “in Shundarban… underwent a substantial deforestation” lacks a clear grammatical subject, and “numerous animals were endengered… and these causes” shifts incorrectly between passive and active forms and between singular and plural agreement. Other problems include missing articles in “decline of any species” and “one of the most important problem.” Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and consistent verb forms, then check articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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