Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that the major environmental problem today is due to the loss of particular species of plants and animals, while others believe that there are more environmental issues. In my opinion, there are some more important environmental problems. For example, air pollution is causing by A.C. and noise pollution is causing by vehicles.

Many of the species plays an important role in fresh breathable environment. Deplition of such species are causing major environmental problem. For example, honey bees are the carriers of pollens. They carry pollens from one tree and spread it to other places. Thousands and millions of trees enable to grow by this process. Some of the rare plants are also spread by this process. As bees colonies are becoming less over the increase in the crowded population of humans, this process is also effected. Less polination causing less spread of pollens and ultimately resulting less production of plants and oxygen. Another example is the cutting down of the trees. We are growing less trees and cutting the trees faster.

On the other hand, high rate of increase in population is demanding more vehicles. More vehocles are causing more noise pollution and their smoke is causing more environmental damage. Increasing in the number of dangerous chemicals causing pollution. Consumption of plastic material is causing pollution as well and when we burn this plastic, it causes more polution in the environment. Fire in the African forest is also casuing environmental problems. Almost 2 degrees of temperature is increasing every year which is increasing the glaciours melting process as well.

In my opinion, other than loss of particular species of plants and animals, there are more important environmental problems. We should decrease the consumption of plastic products, limit the use of private vehicles and promote the punlic transportation and decrease the dependency on woods. We should also plant more trees to control the temperature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your position clearly: you explain why species loss matters, then argue that pollution, population growth and other environmental pressures are more important. The examples about bees and pollination, vehicle emissions, plastic burning and forest fires are relevant. However, several points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the claim that temperature rises by “Almost 2 degrees ... every year” is not supported or clarified, and the link between species loss and oxygen production is simplified. Your proposed actions are relevant but brief. To strengthen the response, develop fewer examples more carefully, explain why the wider problems outweigh species loss, and support claims with accurate, specific reasoning. (17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on species loss, a paragraph on other environmental problems, and a concluding opinion with recommendations. This helps the reader follow the two sides. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose: the discussion moves from vehicle pollution to chemicals, plastic, forest fires and melting glaciers without clearly grouping or linking these examples. Connectors such as “For example,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” are useful, but the links between individual claims are often basic or unclear. Some references, including “this process,” require the reader to infer exactly what is meant. Group related causes and effects, and use clearer transitions to show how each point supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to discuss environmental issues, including “species,” “pollination,” “noise pollution,” “chemicals,” and “glaciers.” These terms make the main ideas understandable, and you attempt some more specific language when describing bees and plant reproduction. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors are noticeable, such as “fresh breathable environment,” “less polination,” “vehocles,” and “glaciours.” Repetition of “causing pollution” and “environmental problems” also reduces precision. Build a wider set of accurate collocations for causes, effects and solutions, and check spelling carefully. More precise phrasing would make your explanations clearer without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “when we burn this plastic, it causes more pollution.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “Many of the species plays,” “Deplition ... are causing,” “air pollution is causing by A.C.,” and “Almost 2 degrees of temperature is increasing.” These show problems with subject–verb agreement, passive forms and sentence construction. There are also errors in articles and plural forms. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and distinguishing active from passive voice, then proofread each sentence for agreement and verb form. Clearer sentence structures will help your ideas come through.

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