Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is a debate that serious surrounding issue of this period is the destroy of various habitat whereas there are many different greater surrounding issues. This essay will discuss both the views, followed by my opinion.

To begin with, there are various reason of main environmental issue is loss of habitat. Firstly, it arises air pollution. To explain, plants are the source of oxygen and rise in traffic pollution and loss of plants directly impact the surroundings where people have to suffer from diseases caused by air pollution. Secondly, increases of bacteria and fungus. Elaborating further, mainly bacteria and fungus are consumed by animals which help person to avoid the bacteria which may harm the health and because of loss of animals, people are getting viruses from bacteria that should be eaten by animals.

On the other hand, there are also other problems expect loss of habitats. The first issues is manufacturing items near the places where highly population lives. To clarify, people having house near factories have to be in touch with this types of problem where they do not have any option of ignoring. Similarly, the another problem is not minimizing waste products. For instance, mainly in the city area, wastes are just collected in one places and do not do any thing to manage it in proper way which affect the whole environment near that polluted area and people suffer from difficulties.

In conclusion, both types of environmental issues affect the life of the people. regarding my opinion, I believe except loss of plant and animals, other problems are also here which should be controlled and managed properly within year which may cause more difficulties in the future time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question: the first body paragraph discusses the loss of plants and animals, while the second introduces other concerns such as factory pollution and waste management. Your conclusion also gives a preference for controlling these wider problems. However, the response only partially develops the task. The opening refers to the “destroy of various habitat,” which is not the same as the loss of particular species, and the link between species loss and “increases of bacteria and fungus” is difficult to follow. The alternative problems are relevant, but their effects are described generally. State your position more clearly and support each main point with a specific, accurate explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the explanation about bacteria, fungi, animals, and viruses does not show a clear chain of cause and effect. Some linking phrases are mechanical or awkward, including “Elaborating further” and “Similarly, the another problem.” Improve cohesion by making each paragraph develop one central point in a logical sequence, and use pronouns and transitions only when their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “waste products,” “factories,” and “environment,” and you use some relevant terms such as “habitats.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear. For example, “serious surrounding issue” and “greater surrounding issues” are not natural ways to describe environmental problems, while “the destroy of various habitat” uses an incorrect word form and number. “In touch with this types of problem” also does not express the intended idea clearly. Build a more precise set of environmental collocations and check word forms, plurals, and natural combinations before using less familiar vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including explanations introduced by “To explain” and “For instance,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure and basic grammar. Examples include “there are various reason,” “the first issues is,” and “the another problem,” where agreement, number, or article use is faulty. The sentence beginning “people having house near factories” is also not formed as a complete, clear clause. Punctuation and capitalisation need attention, particularly the lowercase “regarding” after the conclusion’s opening sentence. Practise accurate sentence patterns before adding longer clauses.

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