Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Owing to the increase in environmental problems, some people are of the opinion that the most notible loss is that of various species of plants and animals, where as others champion that there are more severe environmental issues. This is so because most plants and animals have gone into extinction thereby lowering site attraction and value. However, environmental pollution and depletion of natural resources are more severe. In my opinion, I strongly believe that the later poses more problems than the formal. These points will be explained in the following paragraphs with relevant examples followed by a logical conclusion.

To begin with, there have been depletion of various plants and animals species resulting in their extinction. This in a long run has reduced the attention and attraction those plants and animals offer in areas such as zoos or attraction sites. Since they are no longer available, people no longer pay to go see or watch them, this inturn reduces revenue for such organisation. Also, the value attacted to these species of plants and animals significantly diminishes, especially when they do not attract tourist anymore due to their unavailability.

Furthermore, apart from loss of species of plants and animals, environmental pollution with green house gases emitted from vehicles and machineries pose more risk, as these pollution can result in various sicknesses expecially respiratory track infection. Also, natural resourses are greatly reduced by man-made activities such as deforestation; this has brought about destruction of natural habitats of different species of animals and plants. I am of the opinion that these environmental pollution and reduction of natures resourses brings more threat.

In conclusion, various species of plants and animals are going into extinction however, i am of the opinion that destruction of natural resourses and environmental pollution possesses more risk as such should be managed properly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference: pollution and resource depletion pose greater threats than species loss. The discussion of species extinction is relevant, and you give a consequence—reduced visitor income for zoos or attractions. However, this side is developed mainly through tourism and economic value, rather than explaining the wider environmental consequences of losing species. Your preferred view is also only partly supported: you mention greenhouse-gas pollution, respiratory illness and habitat destruction, but do not explain their broader effects or provide a specific example. To strengthen the response, develop each view with a clear cause-and-effect explanation and make your comparison more explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” help readers follow the discussion, and your position is repeated in the final paragraph. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some stronger control through paragraphing. However, links can feel mechanical, and some references are unclear: “these pollution” does not clearly connect grammatically to the preceding idea, while “the latter” and “the former” in the introduction require readers to work out which view each refers to. Use more precise transitions and refer back to ideas by naming them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “extinction,” “greenhouse gases,” “deforestation,” and “natural habitats,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “poses more risk” and “destruction of natural habitats.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “notible,” “resourses,” “attacted,” and “expecially” are misspelled, while “champion that” and “site attraction” are unnatural in context. Some wording is repetitive, particularly references to “plants and animals” and “environmental pollution.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning natural collocations for environmental topics, then vary repeated expressions where the meaning allows.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a subordinate clause in “Since they are no longer available…” and a contrast introduced by “however.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “there have been depletion” needs a singular or uncountable construction, and “these pollution can result” has a number-agreement problem. In “the later poses more problems than the formal,” the comparison is not expressed with the correct grammatical forms. There are also issues with articles, plurals and punctuation, including the comma splice in the conclusion before “however.” Review agreement and sentence boundaries, and proofread longer sentences while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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