Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Although many people say the major concern of todays time is explotation of particular bread of flora and funna and other belive hat there are other major environmental issues.

To begin with, there are several reasons to concern about the specific plants and animlas. They are widely being hunted. To explain it, the rear plants and animals are being hunt for there price and the value that they cost in the market. Due to some the medical benefist and some dare due to they are very rear to find and to keep them as decorative item or collective thing. For instance, the animals like one horne rhino is hunted for that one horn which is nvery valubale and dose have many medicinal benefits too. plant like red shandelwood is cut down for the price of money that they cost in market and in the black market for its medicinal benefits and the use of its in luxurary cousmetic products.

On the other hand, there are other major environmental challenges. Global warming. Elaborating on it, the effects of global warming insen it not only hamperes the plamts nad animlas it effect the eco system of the earth. This is because of pollution like air , water and due to the raise in earth temptreature which has vast impacts. To be specific, landslide and the mealting of artic ice is now the more imprtant and the thing of major concern due to te harmful gases like carbondioxide and other in air by which the temperature is rising and leadong towards the distruction of earth and to show angry face side nature.

To conclude, the loss of some particular species of plant and animlas are the problem but there are other major environmental issues to concern which has harsh impacts on the environment and whole eco system of nature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views: the first body paragraph explains how rare species are hunted for medicinal, decorative and commercial value, while the second identifies global warming and pollution as broader threats. The rhino and red sandalwood examples make the first view more concrete, and your conclusion indicates that you consider wider environmental problems important. However, your own position is not fully clear until the conclusion, and the second view is less developed: the links between pollution, rising temperatures, landslides and melting Arctic ice are asserted rather than explained. Develop the comparison more explicitly and clarify which problem you consider most serious, with a reason. This would make the response more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, the second body paragraph begins with the fragment “Global warming,” then moves quickly from pollution to temperature rise, landslides and melting ice without clearly showing how each point connects. Some references, such as “it” and “they,” are also unclear. Use complete topic sentences and organise each paragraph around a clear sequence of claim, explanation and example; use linking expressions to show relationships rather than simply announce a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medicinal benefits,” “black market,” “global warming,” “pollution” and “ecosystem.” These choices show that you can address environmental issues with some topic-specific language. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause, as in “explotation,” “rear,” “valubale” and “distruction.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “the price and the value that they cost” and “show angry face side nature.” Aim to use fewer, more precise expressions and check spelling carefully. Learning common collocations such as “species are hunted for their commercial value” and “the effects of climate change” would make your meaning clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including explanations introduced by “because” and “which,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, sentence control is uneven. The opening sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Global warming” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, for example “They are widely being hunted” and “the effects … hamperes … it effect.” Articles and sentence boundaries need attention as well. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add a subordinate clause only when its relationship is clear. Proofread for subject–verb agreement, verb forms and punctuation, especially in longer sentences.

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