Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many individuls say that the main environmental issue of our time is the loss of the particular species of plants and animals. other criticis that the there are more significal environmental problems. i strongly argee with this statement because palnts and animals plays an important role in human life and around the globe.

On one hand, loss of plants and animal species major cause for environment such as plant play a significal role in human healths, provide a clean atmosphere, however, animal also provides a nutrient for human such as milk, meats, peoples make a profit from animal in term of sales. Nowadays, many people destried a huge amount of forst called deforestion, and hunting animal for there porpesis, for instant, local people were lives in forest area those people cutting a vital palnt whch is gown from ancient time and most important species and also hunting of those animal species which are becoming endanger. both of plants and animals play an important role in our environment.

On the other hand, the deforestion can creates a huge obstacle in environmental condition, the deforestion effect floods and make atmosphere polluted such as the lack of clean oxygen in environment. meanwhile, hunting of endengers animal species such liperd,elepents, lot of people destroed their colonies and exports the parts of these animal for sales. many experts and researchers argure that these invasive species most important for environment.

In conclustion, main environmental probem of oure time isthe lose of particular species of plants and animals. most people involved to cutting the forest, and hunting a invasive species for there porposes. however, these destruction creates a lot of issue in environment such as the risk of flooding.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear view in the introduction—“i strongly argee with this statement”—and return to the loss of species in the conclusion. The response also gives relevant examples, including deforestation, hunting, and endangered animals. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the second view—that other environmental problems are more important—is not explained as a distinct argument. Deforestation and pollution are mentioned, but mainly as consequences of habitat destruction and species loss, rather than as competing environmental concerns. Several claims, such as plants’ role in health and animals’ role in providing food, are listed without explaining their wider environmental significance. Develop both positions separately and support your opinion with clearer reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic framework, and the examples generally relate to environmental damage. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from plants and human health to animal products, deforestation, and hunting without clearly connecting these points. Some linking words, including “however” and “meanwhile,” do not show the relationship between ideas accurately. References such as “these invasive species” are also unclear because the animals discussed are described as endangered, not invasive. Organise each paragraph around one main argument, then use clear explanations and references to connect its supporting details.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “deforestation,” “atmosphere,” “endanger,” “species,” and “floods,” and these choices show awareness of the subject. However, the range is limited and many words or phrases are inaccurate, misspelled, or used in unnatural combinations, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “significal environmental problems,” “a nutrient for human,” “for there porpesis,” and “invasive species” where the context appears to mean endangered species. Repeated use of “important,” “environment,” and “species” also limits precision. Build a reliable set of topic collocations and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “significant environmental concerns,” “a source of nutrition,” and “endangered species.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence attempts and basic structures, including a contrast between “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent problems with agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries make several sentences hard to process. For example, “plants and animals plays” should have a plural verb, while “the deforestion can creates” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening also contains a run-on sequence, and the conclusion has unclear sentence construction. These errors sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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