Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is believe by some that losing rare flora and fauna is the primary problem of environment in this contemporary world, whereas others think that there are more essential environmental problems that we should address first. While both sides have their valid reasons to support their arguments, I believe we should focus on current environmental problems that we are facing.

On the one hand, people who think preserving particular species is inportant in today's world give their own reasons. Firstly, some plans and animals are very cricial for human existant such as snakes and some plants that could be use as medicine. For this reason some individuals think that governtments should preserve those important plants that could be use in the future. For example, there are still some diseases that are incurable namely cencer, diobetic and so on, therse diseases could be cure by some special plants or animals. Therefore, the government should collect all rare species that are disappearing day by day.

On the other hand, some individuals believe there are other inportant problems that governmants should focus on. In other words, we are facing environmental challenges such as air pollution, water pollution, deforestion and so on. If this problem continues then human might face some bigger challenges in the future, such as diseases, shorter life span because of those ignored environmental issues. Moreover, the government should restic the use of plastic items because these are not only detrimental to human, but also for the environment. That is why I think that the government shouldd first address problems first.

In conclusion, although it is there are some valid reasons behinde first view, that we should preserve rare species

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views and state your position in the introduction: you favour addressing current environmental problems. The body paragraphs also give relevant reasons, including the possible medical value of species and the effects of pollution and deforestation. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because the ideas are brief and under-developed. The example linking rare species to treatments for cancer and diabetes is speculative and needs clearer explanation or a more reliable example. Your position is also not fully reinforced: the final paragraph is incomplete, so it does not provide a clear concluding judgement or summarise why broader environmental problems should take priority. Develop each argument with a specific explanation and finish with a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and an attempted conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and linking phrases can feel mechanical. For example, “For this reason” and “Therefore” introduce closely related points without adding much development, while “That is why I think that the government shouldd first address problems first” repeats the same idea. The conclusion stops before completing its point, which weakens the overall progression. Use clearer links between claims and explanations, avoid repeating transitions or ideas, and complete the final paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “flora and fauna,” “rare species,” “air pollution,” “water pollution,” and “deforestation,” so the subject is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make parts difficult to understand, such as “inportant,” “cricial,” “existant,” “governtments,” and “diobetic.” Some collocations are also unnatural, including “primary problem of environment” and “collect all rare species.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “the main environmental problem,” “human survival,” and “protect endangered species.” Check spelling carefully and choose precise terms; this will make your arguments easier to follow and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast clause in the introduction (“While both sides have their valid reasons…”) and a conditional sentence beginning “If this problem continues.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader pause. Examples include “It is believe by some” instead of a correctly formed passive, “plants and animals … could be use,” and “human might face,” where verb forms or agreement are incorrect. The final sentence is also incomplete: “although it is there are some valid reasons behinde first view…” Practise accurate passive forms, modal constructions, articles, and subject–verb agreement. Use shorter, complete sentences when you are unsure, then build complexity while checking each clause.

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