Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

All species of plant ,animals and human collectively makes an environment.The disturbance in any part of environment can bring negative vibes .Both animals and plants are essential for food chain.Loss of any specie can lead us to starving conditions.

The extinction of plants and animals is rising day by day.several of them are endangered now.To address this issue ,Government is trying its best and have done a lot of measurements for reservation of endangered species.People are true that it is main problem right now.The issues like hunting,commericializing and forest burning are hot topics these days.For instance ,the incident of Amazon forest burning resulted in lose of habitat and death of several animal species.

Some people think it is not a major issue.There are enomrous other problems with our environment like pollution,ozone depletion,global warming and extreme weather conditions .In contemporary world people are disturbed mainly by earthquacks, flood ,drought and starvation.For instance,In earthquack of 2005,about 5 million people were died and 2 million became homeless.Some people are considering these the main problems to pounder upon.

Both arguments are right and deserves equal importance to be discussed.We can not ignore the animal and plants due to there basic importance in our food chain.It is impossible for human beings to survive without them.On the other ,the drastic environmental conditions are also connected to deforestation and extinction of particular plants and trees.One must consider other problems important to illustrate and how to cop with them as well.

To conclude,our earth is our habitat .Every specie is equally beneficial for its atmosphere .Fluctuation in any component can disturb its nature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both views and give a position, especially in the paragraph beginning “Both arguments are right,” where you argue that species loss and wider environmental problems both deserve attention. The Amazon example also supports the discussion of habitat loss. However, the response only partly develops the task: the first view is linked mainly to food-chain importance, while the second lists pollution, ozone depletion and extreme weather without explaining their effects or comparing their scale with species loss. The earthquake example illustrates human disaster rather than an environmental problem, so its relevance to the question is unclear. Your conclusion repeats the idea that every species matters but does not clearly resolve which view you find more convincing. Develop and support each side more directly, then state a definite overall judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: it introduces the topic, gives a paragraph to each view, presents your own position and ends with a conclusion. Paragraphing helps the reader follow this structure, and phrases such as “For instance” signal examples. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. “Some people think it is not a major issue” does not specify which issue, and “On the other” is an incomplete transition. The final paragraph moves from species loss to drastic environmental conditions without fully explaining the connection. Improve cohesion by using precise references to the ideas already introduced and by making the relationship between causes and consequences explicit. This would make the progression smoother and reduce the sense of separate points being listed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “endangered,” “habitat,” “deforestation,” “pollution” and “global warming,” which allows you to address the environmental theme. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “contemporary world” and “deserves equal importance.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the meaning less clear, including “commericializing,” “enomrous,” “pounder” and “cop.” Some combinations are also unnatural: “negative vibes” is informal for this essay, and “measurements for reservation” does not clearly express conservation action. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish environmental pressures, their causes and their consequences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “The disturbance in any part of environment can bring…” and the conditional structure “It is impossible for human beings to survive without them.” These attempts show some range, but errors are frequent and can make sentences difficult to follow. For example, “All species … collectively makes” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Government is trying its best and have done” shifts incorrectly between verb forms. Articles and plurals are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “a environment,” “any specie” and “the animal and plants.” Sentence punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, and some long sentences need clearer grammatical structure. Practise accurate agreement, articles and plural forms, then proofread each sentence for a complete, correctly punctuated structure.

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