Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Several individuals argue that the main environmental cause of our site is the damage of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more necessary environmental causes. From my precpectives the main cause of our environment is pollution.

First of all, i would like to talk about pollution because our enivironment is ruined due to pollution which is very awful for us. For instance when we drive and ride cars, bikes, trucks, buses and other transport vehicles its smokes harms our environment a lot which is very harmful for breath. That is a huge cause for our environment.

On the other hand, loss of plants and animals is a biggest cause for environmental problems. For instance whenever we cuts the plants for our purposes and kill the animals for any reasons like when are hungry and for eraning that is huge effect for our environment cause.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear opinion that pollution is the main environmental problem, and you mention both pollution and the loss of plants and animals. However, the discussion is very brief and only minimally addresses the task: neither view is explained in enough depth, and the examples are general rather than developed. The response contains 136 words, so it is 114 words below the required minimum; 13 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This leaves little space to explain why species loss matters, compare it with other environmental problems, or support your own position. To improve, develop each view with a specific cause and consequence, then explain why you consider one problem more serious.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph about pollution, and a paragraph about species loss. Phrases such as “First of all” and “On the other hand” signal the intended progression, and the reader can identify the two sides. However, the ideas within each paragraph are not developed in a clear sequence, and several points are repeated, such as calling each issue a “huge cause” or effect. The final paragraph also ends without a conclusion that restates your comparison or opinion. Use each paragraph to make one main point, explain it, and connect it to a specific example; then add a brief concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant environmental vocabulary, including “pollution,” “plants and animals,” and “environment,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the response difficult to interpret. For example, “environmental cause” does not express the task’s idea of an environmental problem, and “harmful for breath” is not a natural way to describe the effect of vehicle emissions. There are also spelling errors such as “precpectives,” “enivironment,” and “eraning.” Build a small set of accurate topic phrases, such as “air pollution,” “habitat loss,” and “species extinction,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a sentence beginning “For instance when we drive and ride cars…”. The main ideas can usually be followed, but control is uneven, especially in longer sentences. Examples include “its smokes harms,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “whenever we cuts,” where the verb form is incorrect. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “a biggest cause” is not correctly formed, and the opening sentence contains several ideas that would be clearer if separated. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence punctuation, then use a few controlled complex sentences to explain causes and effects.

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