Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

At first I want to discuss the view that why some People talk that the Original environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of Trees and Creatures. It is true that, different types of plants and animals play a great role in our environmental life. They can glow the beauty of nature. If there have enough creatures like this, the Eco system of the environment keeps healthy.

On the other hand, Some person thinks there are more essential environmental problems. In my perspective, some other environmental problem is air pollution, water pollution, traffic noise etc. These problems also create more issues than first one.

I personally believe that, the lack of natural creatures make environmental problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both views: the first paragraph says plants and animals support the ecosystem, while the second names pollution and traffic noise as other concerns. You also state an opinion, but “the lack of natural creatures make environmental problem” is too brief to show clearly how you weigh the two views. The response addresses the task only minimally because neither side is explained with reasons or relevant examples, and the opinion is not developed. The response contains 108 words, which is 142 words short of the 250-word minimum; this leaves too little space to fulfil the discussion task. Develop each view with a specific explanation or example, then state which problem you consider most serious and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and “On the other hand” signals a shift from species loss to other environmental problems. This gives the reader some sense of the two sides. However, there is no clear progression within the paragraphs: ideas are introduced but not explained or linked to supporting details. The final sentence repeats the first view rather than drawing the discussion together or clarifying your position. Some linking is also awkward, as in “At first I want to discuss the view that why…”. Organise the essay into an introduction, one developed paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Use linking phrases to show relationships between ideas, not just to announce a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “species,” “ecosystem,” “air pollution,” and “water pollution,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear: “glow the beauty of nature,” “environmental life,” and “natural creatures” do not express your intended meaning naturally. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “People,” “Trees,” and “Some.” These issues make parts of the response difficult to interpret precisely. Build a more accurate set of environmental terms and use common collocations, such as “enhance natural beauty,” “maintain ecological balance,” and “wildlife species.” Check spelling and capitalisation, and avoid repeating broad words such as “problem” without specifying the issue.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and a conditional structure, for example, “If there have enough creatures like this, the Eco system of the environment keeps healthy.” However, the response relies mainly on short, basic sentence patterns, and the attempted conditional is not grammatically controlled. Other errors include “At first I want to discuss the view that why…” and “the lack of natural creatures make environmental problem,” where clause structure, subject–verb agreement, and articles are problematic. Commas are also placed after introductory phrases in ways that interrupt the sentence, as in “It is true that, different types…”. Practise forming clear main clauses and accurate if-clauses, and check agreement and articles when editing. More varied sentence structures will help you explain and connect your ideas.

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