Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of perticular species of plants and animals.Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

From my perspective , and what i see in my counrtry ,i think that the human do a bad things in the green places and hurts the animals and the plants .The ecosystem must must have animals and plants to have a good nature , but many people have a bad ideas in their minds for example they smoke cigates and drink glasses of wine in green place and put their rubbish in it , sometimes the fires come from this things and the nature will be destroying as a result the ecosystem will be destroying and the animals and the plants died like we see in Algeria in many cities espicely in Jijel and Skikda , the goverments do a lot of researches to put the public that have a relation with fires in the prison. We see that the human did the bad things without a reason.

However , this is not just the main problem as the environmental problems. If we see the long picture , we see that a lot of companies and bussineses destroy the ecosystem with using the chemicals products to change the air and as a result we see many people , animals and plants died .

In conclusion, we see that the main problem is the human ( people kill each other without knowing ) .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You refer to both views: the first body paragraph discusses harm to plants and animals, while the next mentions pollution from companies. However, the discussion is only partial. The second view is stated briefly, with no clear explanation of why problems such as chemical pollution may be more important, and the conclusion shifts to people killing one another rather than directly answering the environmental question. Your position is also difficult to identify: “From my perspective” introduces an idea, but the essay does not clearly compare the two views or state which you consider more important. The response is 225 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 29 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both views and give a direct, supported opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and “However” and “In conclusion” signal a change of direction and an ending. The first body paragraph also gives a sequence from littering and fires to damage to the ecosystem. However, progression is difficult to follow because the first paragraph contains several ideas in one long chain, and the link between the examples and the claim about species loss is not always clear. The second body paragraph is very brief, so the discussion does not develop evenly. Some references, such as “this things” and “it,” are unclear, and repeated phrases such as “we see” make the connections mechanical. Use one main point per paragraph, with clear links between cause, consequence, and your opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant environmental vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “chemicals,” “fires,” and “rubbish,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning less precise, such as “change the air,” “drink glasses of wine,” and “the long picture.” Spelling errors including “perticular,” “counrtry,” “bussineses,” and “espicely” also reduce accuracy. Repetition of “bad things,” “people,” and “we see” limits the ability to express distinctions between species loss, pollution, and human causes. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling; for example, describe how industrial chemicals “pollute the air and water” rather than “change the air.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences that connect causes and results, for example, the sentence beginning “sometimes the fires come from this things.” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas, and the main message can usually be understood. However, control is uneven in longer structures, and some sentences contain repeated or missing grammatical elements. Examples include “the human do a bad things,” “must must have,” and “the animals and the plants died,” where agreement, repetition, and tense choices need attention. Sentence boundaries are also unclear in places, particularly where several clauses are joined with commas. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past or present forms, and divide long chains into shorter sentences with appropriate punctuation.

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